Awesome story hope you update again soon :D
Ithilya x

Oh very nice! Tis so true that it's out of charecter for Gene to be wet so how you did Gene being not quiet emotional was ace. Looking forward to some good ol' detecting and how the meal with Casey is going to work out.

Yikes! I didn't see that comeing, but an oh-so-Sam reaction, nice. Ace as always.

Ooh, a murder! Very exciting. Plus;

“Because, Tyler, you can be the voice of reason if need be. She can be a stubborn little mare when she wants to be.” “I wonder which of her parents she inherited that quality from?” Sam joked, seeing the Govs eyes narrow a little.

Fantastic!

It's so exciting when I get a notification for this story. There isn't nearly enough good LoM fic on here.

Ooh, that was really good. Sorry I've only just reviewed, I swear I'd subscribed to an alert... oh well, I have now! The last scene was very well written. What will Gene think if he ever finds out?

Yikes! It's like having a mini version of Gene in the house! Very good as always, and egerly awaiting the next chapter.

'His Governors face screwed up. “You know, Tyler that was below the belt even for a handbag swinging girl like you.”'

LOVED this line. Great chapter as always, looking forward to finding out what Sam's up to.

Ooh, things are really heating up here! There are a few points, but as always, they're suggestions, not orders ;)

up most => utmost
mind find => might find

"Move to the top of the class and collect the pencils on the way round." => loved it :D

unprepared => refusing. I think I know what you were trying to say, but unprepared means not ready, as in caught off guard and floundering.

almightily => This isn't really needed. You can't have a gentle abrupt stop; the word 'abrupt' does all the description ;) If you wanted to make it have more impact, you could add a line of description along the lines of '"What?" Hunt bellowed, slamming on the brakes and causing the car to stop so abruptly that Sam was almost flung through the windscreen.'

I loved Gene's reaction to Casey. Heh. I'm evil, I know, but it was in character; I could just hear Gene spitting at her :P

Again, you might want to think about cutting down on the pretty and flowery analogies. 'A thousand bees waiting to be drowned in an ever flowing fountain of sadness' is fine for poetry or (possibly) high fantasy, but in stories like this it doesn't quite work; it distracts from the flow and makes it appear more amateurish. Simple is usually better and has far more of an impact on the reader :)

I was firmly with Gene on this one; screaming "I HATE YOU!", crying and running away doesn't do much to convince people you're mature :D

he'd make => he'd made
poff => poof
Rearrange => rearranging
draw => drawer

Can't wait to see where Sam's going and what he's going to do when he gets there (again, have a fair idea but I'll keep quiet until I find out if I'm right ;))

Sorry, I owe you a backlog of reviews...I'm working on it ;) In the meantime, thoughts on this chapter:

suspects houses - suspects' houses

WPC Carlisle - I'm a little puzzled; I thought Casey was part of CID? If so, then her title should be WDC (Woman Detective Constable as opposed to Woman Police Constable) Also on a side note, DC Cartwright should be WDC Cartwright :)

walking pass - walking past

shrill wails of undernourished cats and children alike - I like this, very descriptive :D

his voice just didn't live up to his expectations - Heh, been there ;) Nice one

plonks - plonk's (or if you wanted to avoid too many apostrophes, you could try something like "That 'plonk' is called Annie"

little choice other than offering them inside - um, did you mean 'inviting'? ;)

"Oh 'appy days!" - This made me laugh out loud!

I liked the way you build up the tension Casey's feeling about Bolton; it's clear without being rammed down our throats.

get's - gets

summats - summat

His hands, a little shaken - Do you mean his hands were shaking a little? I'm not sure how hands can look shaken (read: frightened and bewildered) ;)

I love the ending; I wonder how Gene's going to react to this...?

Looking forward to more!

So sorry I havent reviewed in a while, I've only just caught up from Chapter 9 to here. But! Ace as always, the plot thickens, and I like it! I love how you really are making Casey into a female Gene, your doing it really realisticly and I like how we get Sam's POV as well as Casy's. Can't wait for more.

Ooh... I wonder what's going on between Mark and Casey! Intriguing... great chapter as always!

Gene's sudden “’Ow are things going between you and the plonk?” caused a sudden outbreak of the giggles.

Well done again! Looking forward to the next chapter

Another excellent chapter! I thought Gene's confused logic relating to the guilt of Mark and Jerry was excellent - very him. Can't wait for more :D

Amazing chapter! I'm looking forward to seeing how the Gene/Casey relationship develops. Well done!

Ah, so Test Card Girl's made another appearance ;) Great stuff!

I could only find a few points in this chapter:

Sam Tyler's day rapidly deteriorated => should be 'had rapidly deteriorated', as the day is now over and he's looking back on it

good nights kip => good night's kip

offender her => offend her

that he would have to bare witness to her smug smile => that he would never have to bear witness to her smug smile

On to chapter 7!

Heh, I liked Sam's disorientation ;)

almightily => almighty

Gladys’s => Gladys

"Let me take a look at your eye." => "Let me take a look at your eye,"

Casey half enquired, half subtly told => I like the way this is done, but I'm not sure about the words. 'Enquiring' is only really used when the person wants information in answer to a question. 'Subtly' is either a delicate or cunning way of going about something; it's not often used when telling someone something. Maybe something like: "Casey half requested, half ordered". Just a thought though :)

the slightly swallow skin => Um...did you mean swollen skin?

Their grins were huge, lighting up the room as if they were Aurora Borealis => This reads as a little too flowery; maybe something a little simpler: "Their grins were huge, lighting up the room like a spotlight"

fair well => farewell

I liked the last line in this as well; you know how to keep people hanging!

All that aside, this storyline is pure gold. I'm really looking forward to seeing Gene's dilemma with his daughter; is he going to risk gossip by not making lewd remarks about Casey, or is he going to make them towards his own daughter just to avoid people finding out the truth?