Wow, this was awesome!

oh, hell yeah, that was great! I always loved good old Richie, and that was a fantastic literation! keep it up

You wrote this wonderfully! Once I started reading it, I wasn't able to stop until the end. There were some grammatical errors, but only minor ones. Overall, I loved it; it was like getting a real look into Richard Braintree's head.

Excellent work. ^.^