Despite himself, he giggled a little at the picture of a bed-tussled Soren stumbling into the room to lecture them about how the army tactician needs his beauty sleep.

I lol'ed at that part. Is it funny that i can see Soren like this? XD
Nice story~. I've never read a RolfxRhys before this |3

aww so nice ^^ I loved this! there both so cool.. awesome job!

Aww so sweet. I've never seen this pairing before but I like it. +D

Hahaha, I finally got around to review your story. It was a cute story, yes. As for the critiques, you had a few run-on sentences and missed some commas, but that's okay. It's a common mistake (that even I do!)

Rolf was a little out of character, but it's to be expected if he start displaying affection towards Rhys. I just would have expected Rolf to talk less...adult-ish. His word choices didn't sound like his normal self in-game. Other than that, nicely written (and this is coming from someone who's not particularly interested in the pairing...lol)

I'm surprised to say that I absolutely love this story. I'm really not one for underaged pairings at all, but Rolf's crush in this was very cute.

It's just the way you wrote and characterized it, I guess. The mentioning of Soren was a very nice touch. You're grammar was the best I've seen in a long time.

I really enjoyed this.

Firstly, I will say that I'm sorry you've been victimized by that weak excuse for a troll, and I'm sorry your flamers weren't very eloquent. If someone is going to give you something other than compliments, they might as well be polite about it if they intend to keep what shred of dignity they've got left.

On to the review.

Now, what I liked about Rhys as a character was the fact that he wasn't a self-piteous whiny creature. He was unwell, but he didn't go wailing about it for pity. Maybe it was just my terrible horrible flamer perspective, but he seemed a little... wimpy here. I don't know. Perhaps it was just me. I would say, with a person like Rhys, optimism helped him through most of his life, and I doubt he'd give that the boot over a spell of what appears to be the stomach flu.

Additionally, he's victimized by other ailments, I think-- chills, fever, dizziness, and so on. I hate to get so technical, but I never realized one ailment would get so repetitive so quickly.

The whole sweet concern thing from Rolf was nice, I thought, but knowing what it will eventually drag into sort of wore away the pleasantry, in my mind. And really, I think the whole idea was just a very touchy subject from the beginning. Not only must we take into account the ages of the characters, but the profession of one of said characters. It just seems a little... tasteless, I'm afraid. I'm sure this was hardly your intention, but it does attract a nice horde of trolls and flamers (such as myself).

I would say you should just try again elsewhere-- find a different, less controversial-sounding pairing, slash or otherwise, and write that instead. I don't think there's any harm in slash if it's in good taste, but well meaning or not, this one seems to err on the side of the lesser. I'm sure you're capable of better.

Better luck next time.

Ohoho, I love that little cliffhanger right thar. They're also very IC, and the flow, description and dialogue were all well done. Keep it up, yo.

This is a pretty average fic so far. Characters are pretty flat, the writing is average (needs a bit of work, really), and well... it's written around barfing. The whole "omg am I gay? I like a dude oh no!" plot is old and boring and lacks any kind of imagination.

All in all, it seems more like a fetish based fic then an actual story.

This is pretty damn badly written. it made my eyes bleed lol

This is the worst thing I have ever read, or that ever will be read in the history of this planet.

Oh I like this!
It's well written, and both seem rather in character...
Rolf is really sweet here...
and putting the details about retching... prove that you put realism above romatism XD
Keep it up! *puts on alert*

I liked it. I've never been a big yaoi or yuri fan, but I do read it sometimes. This was really good in the fact that everyone was in character, and I actually liked it! Really, the only person that wrote yaoi that I liked was "Flaming Doritoes", but you changed that! YAY! Interesting story. I love to see what pairings people come up with. I think that you're the first person to write about these two, though...

Rhys and Rolf. Both start with R, don't they? Huh. You know, I thought of this pairing before, but I don't write that stuff. I'm kinda glad that someone did. New pairings are often appreciated. Anyhow, I really liked it. Update soon. I'll read it. You really are good at writing. Keep going, I want to find out what happens!

I HEART YOU. SERIOUSLY, WRITE MORE. YOU HAVE NO CHOICE. I WILL FIND A WAY TO MAKE YOU. Who doesn't love the yaoi? If I hadn't stuck Rhys with Ulki...but whatever. I'd change that if I could.
HURRAY FOR CUTE VOMITING!

Very, very interesting. I've never read this pairing so I think you may be the first to do it. I've unfortunately never gotten their supports together but I do imagine that they are cute. :)

The writing itself is nice and sharp. The details are wonderful and the conversation is real. I like how they talk about Soren and the romantic attraction is only hinted at for the time being, up until the end. It gave some extra breath of life into the fic. I'm really looking forward to the next chapters.