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| Voration 2007-08-29 ch 1,  | abuseIt is a good story, quite well written and engaging. There are some grammar problems eg: ' I flinched at the horror of the look in their eyes.' A better way toput it could be 'I flinched in horror at the murderous intent that the dremoras eyes revealed.' The ending is a little weak but overall, the story is interesting and worth reading! |