omg this story is so good! i really hope you write more to this! sequel *cough* sequel *cough, cough* lol. but seriously, it calls for a few more chapters or at least a sequel. great work!
Aw, sad ending! Tallulah back away from Johnny now! Turn around! Carl's behind you! And not the young Carl! The this time Carl! Oh darn, I don't think she can hear me. I hope you like make a continuation of this story! I want them to get together! Ooh, funny quote time:
Laszlo watched his sister go, a peculiar look on his face, "You're still wrong but thanks?" He echoed her words then finally shrugged his shoulders. "Hmm, must mean I'm right."
I know it's not a Carl moment, but Laszlo can be funny, too, lol.
You're an amazing writer! I love this story! It's definetly going in my Favvy's!
Okay, I forgot to mention how funny Buzz's character is! He reminds me of Corky from Nancy Drew, and Camila reminds me of a smaller Dominique (she's from America's Next Top Model). And, on another point, how nice of Jhonny to offer to help! But wait! Is he only doing that so he can steal Tallulah's designs? SUSPICIOUS! Still rooting for Carl and Tallulah! Um...what else? Oh yes, funny Carl quote time:
"Oh no! They ate me instead!" the past Carl suddenly yelled in panic.
"Oh, I just knew it. They ate us! No, worse, they ate her and now they're dissecting my parts to offer me up to some heathen god. Oh it's horrible."
I love him! But seriously, what DOES Lewis allow him to watch on TV? The Blob!
Gosh, Johnny sounds like a nice guy. Too bad I'm rooting for Tallulah and Carl. Maybe Johnny can get together with someone else...oh goodness! There is no one else, is there? Well, maybe he can just be best friends with Neil or Gaston or something, lol. Onto Chapter 10...
Okay, great chapter! I like the holographic family album! And Lewis was there! And I like how Frankie addresses himself as Frankie, lol. Oh, and let's not forget the wonderful Carl quotes:
“This is horrible! My future self is doomed! Doomed!” Carl began running around, waving his hands above his head in a panic.
“I’m hiding in a closet?” Carl looked at him unbelievably. “Well, that just proves so much!”
“But what if they tied her up or worse ate her?”
“I’m not sure what you just said, but based on everything else you said, I’m going to say no.”
Haha, I love Carl so much! And your story! Here I go, onto Chapter 8!
Hi there! Awesome story! I was gonna wait till I read all the chapters, 'cuz I don't like to waste space and type after each chapter, but after this chapter I couldn't resist. First off, GREAT inventions. The Time Pauser, the Invisi-belt! AWESOME! Second, the reason I decided to review here is because right when Wilbur said he had two dad's I was like "Omigosh! He's getting Lewis! YAY!" I love Little Lewis! He's awesome! And thirdly, I love how you brought Mildred in here! She's so cool, but she's rarely in stories. Oh and one more thing, Tallulah and Carl? Such a sweet couple! I never really considered it, but yes, they would make a totally perfect couple! Okay, I've talked enough. Onto Chapter 6!
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