Your writing is so impressive. I really liked your internal references. You did a great job developing their relationship in such a way that the audience could feel the changing dynamic without ever really being completely in the loop- it's like they are beyond us, but we can see them. I don't think I quite articulated that right, but in any case, I really enjoyed this background story. Thanks for writing!

Neji and Temari would either drive each other crazy or be one of the most epic couples ever. And with this fic, looks like they got a mix of both. So, it's pre-Shippuden Neji and Tenten, huh? Well, that one works better.

That first line in italics only made sense to me once I had nearly finished the story, hahaha. In any case, that was a beautiful story. And, macabre as it is, the image of Temari with her hair drying in clumps with blood and flesh in them is vivid and... Dare I say beautiful? (okay, that's weird)

I may be ShikaTema, but I'm drawn to this pairing. Maybe Temari just needs a genius.

INteresting story, one I definitely enjoyed. I was kind of confused at the opening line, "It is one month later." Had no idea what this was supposed to be a sequel to until I reached the end. Good story though. and now I'm curious.

Keep up the good work!

Angel

How the heck do you manage to make your stories so believable? I burn with envy.

SO CUTE!

LOVE THE ENDING AND THE WHOLE ONE SHOT!

RATING 10!11

Wonderful. You did a good job of depicting the psychological aftermath of his ordeal without making it harrowing.

The ending was particularly well done.

I'm a ShikaTema person, bur lately I've discovered myself thinking of Temari and Neji together. I mean, Shikamaru's cute, but Neji's freakin hot, and Temari would definetely be the only one able to handle him. And I think he's just too much for Tenten.

Great work, I loved it. It was very interesting.

I don't know, NejiTema wouldn't make too bad of a couple...

Anyway, great story! I loved the part where Neji licked the blood off the kunai to freak the Cloud nin out!

Great job, I hope you post more!

Again, beautifully in-character. We all know Hyuuga's bread was never baked all the way through.

This is an incredible piece. You use some beautiful language and weave amazing imagery though the whole piece.

I'm so impressed by the quality and depth of your writing.

"...and sees something like a flutter of beetle-wings behind her ocean-glass eyes."

A lovely lovely use of the english languange. Great characterizations and story telling.

thanks for sharing this work of art.

spectacular

ack. That was just...god. Although I'm being to suspect you yourself have a few screws loose. They're just the kind of screws that turn out utterly shocking but wonderful genius. I have this mental image of you turning over plots in your mind: "this one is really good and logical..nah...this one makes sense...nah...this one makes no sense whatsoever and is simply bizzare...I'll do it!" And then you write a story so good I'm staring at the screen going "gah" for five minutes afterward. I can't help thinking that this is how writing is supposed to be. Most writers see the road that cannon drives down and prefer to meander down the grassy slope on its edges instead. You run headlong into oncoming traffic and then off into the jungle on the other side. Or something like that. I'm just very impressed, so if I make no sense, please forgive me. Now I'm off to see what else you've written.

This was a really good fanfic. Really great actually. I love the Neji/Temari paring. She's probably the toughest Konoichi around ,other than Tsunade that is, and Neji is probably the only guy tough and patient enough to handle her. Or to not be intimidated by her in other words. Neji's power and genius demand respect. Guess I need to read Mistake to find out what Neji did to get put on probation. I liked it when he said he was made Jounin casue he was good at killing, really good hehe. I liked it when the two of them kissed that's why I was sad that the fanfic doesn't continue casue I want to see them together more. Also your writing is so ggod and I felt like I could feel every tension, ever moment, every emotion in between the two of them. Neji techniques were great the like the falling and running Kaiten. Wish you could do some more Neji/Temari. Thanks for a great Fanfic

Amazing. First word that came to my mind now that I'm writing your review. The language is amazing (haha amazing vocabulary you got and putting that into the story has earned many people's approval i'm sure), the plot; not too complex or shallow; amazing, and I loved every single word of it.

Another amazing thing, you made me love this couple )

This is a much different style than Mistake, but I love it anyway. Longwinded? Nah. It's perfect. I enjoyed the way the Cloud nin kept taunting Neji, and especially the way Neji killed the guy at the end. Temari's characterization was very crazy/pretty. Excellent work!