interesting story, though if you put spaces between the paragraphs it would read a lot easier...

I'm enjoying your story - please continue it!

Intrigueing, but woefully short (i.e: needs many more chaptersto round it out). This is basically the intor to an epic, but the epic itself is missing.

Hey, lessons is a good story. Are you going to finish it someday? Or is it already compleated and you have a web page?
lordofdemons85@yahoo.com

a bit OOC and fast paced like the last one i reviewed,i think that all that power u have sorta drains out of the story, stuff like that should be balanced with a more humble attitude i find...still it's fun imagining keiichi's face!

like the story so far but....Cthulu isn't from hell he's from ryleth (think i spelled that right) and and elder god to boot...not a demon :) but its your story so do what you want...after eons even death may die...oops.

I like it... go on. =)

HOLY CRAPP!!! THIS IS SUCH A COOL FIC!!!
i like how you are taking the time to fully develop each little bit and that you are trying to keep as true to the personalities of the characters from the series(albiet letting them develop). in other words... WHEN"S TH REST OF THE STORY COMING?????!!!!!!

your dood is too powerful, and sorry to be a drag but the storyline just doesn't fit together or with regard to OMG, see Brett Handy's OMG fanfic OH MY GOD for example

Nice fan fic I really enjoyed reading it. The only thing I found wrong with it is my own concern. I am one of those who prefer a goddess such as belldandy being the most powerful. After all that is the reason i got into anime. Still great job.

Is that it?! Chapter 17!!??? PLEASE DON'T STOP THERE!!! KEEP GOING!!! *screams at the top of her lungs* NOOOO!!! -Lace

I believe that you're character is somewhat... over-powerful. It makes Keiichi seem clueless about the Goddess and God world. Even though Keiichi virtually IS clueless, he still has the basic ideas down. In my eyes, I can't see him asking questions like, "Why did you call him Kami-Kun?" It's just so... not Keiichi. I'm sure he'd think it, but he wouldn't say it aloud. It's just one of those personal things that people don't say aloud in order not to reveal how dumb they really are. ^_^
-Lace

I love it so far! -Lace (P.S. You really capture all the characters' personalities well!)

this is good, but I still don't get what the hell is going on. I feel like I should, but I don't. there seems to be some sort of overall plot going on, but I don't even know who "I" or "Us" is. you also spelled "complacent" wrong in one of the earlier chapters. I hope you finish this soon, or at least explain some stuff. perhaps explaining more (ie. letting it come out in the plot) would keep it moving. good luck, either way.

Hmmm... has potential. Has a healthy dose of humor, but could use a bit of polishing on conflict/plot set. Keep going!