hey! i like the fic so far just a little bit pf constructive critic:

When you are gonna put something in another lenguage, try to get someone that know the lenguage because when someone reads it an know the rigth way to said it .. can get confused.. like:

Maria lo que es su nombre de gato? (this means something like: Maria you cat has a cats name) or something like that
the rigth way will be:
Maria, ¿cómo se llama tu gato?
or
Qué está equivocado, Maria?
what you want to say is:
Qué es lo que sucede/pasa/ocurre, maria?
-whats wrong?-

anyways i like your spanish its A LOT BETTER! than some people i know from US


ITS NOT A FLAME! just for the future!

its a good fic i like it!

They don't know her, not to like her. They don't like her on some ** up principle.

*looks in fridge*
Jordan...why is there vodka in here?
Jordan:...It's Gabby's! Not mine!
*looks at puppy*
Jordan: See she looks guilty!
She looks guilty all the time!

hey! that was a cool chapter, i like how you describe aikka's family personalities and the way they live with each others.

actually u have a few mistakes in the spanish parts, but they are okay like that. Actually i talk spanish so if u want something just say it.

update soon please!!

YAY!ASOME!FINALY YOU UPDATED!I'VE BIN WATING TO READ THIS!^_^ this is one of my fav storys!I only wait 4 a new chapter when I reallt like the story!

*claps* bravo, wonder where i'd be in this... prabably the mid-section, i suppose. *laughs* the bookworm with a large vocabulary and a disagreeable personality. keep updating please.

A cool chapter and a cool story!
Keep it up!

:)

What was the original Jordan? I wonder if this was the moderated, what could be the other. Anyway I love it! Please update as soon as you can!

o cliffhangar

yah!

Poor Leya! Poor Sheska! I love this story! Update update update! This sounds sorta like that book 'The Outsiders'

grr ** messed up **. People don't deserve this.

OMG Jordan I told you to stay away from from that stuff you fruit cup! Expect a art of Eva and being sober.

i love it =D please update asp

that so sad poor leya!! i so love this stroy! upsate asap