This was absolutely beautiful.

I love you.

So beautiful... so brilliant... gah, I'm just so stinking overwhelmed I can't review properly!

You already know you're an amazing writer, but for the sake of lose of words I'll remind you just how much. This was so well thought out, with all of the little loose ends of the show orchestrated logically in the scenerio. Maya developed so much in this story, maybe even more so than Will; that her upcoming death has me upset anew. Damn, you're good sweetie!

To hear Maya's final thoughts, that she had nothing to lose by telling Hometown what she knew, led me to further think about her recorded torture. Suddenly being told that Will was alive must have thrown her thoughts in a thousand directions. She now had reason to live, so she begged for her life... but it was taken anyway.

I would like to think your layout of events between the pair were real, because they fit so nicely into the air time they did have together. I'm never going to be able to read "Ready, Set, Go" again without thinking about this story; that phrase just seemed so perfect for their life. They were constantly preparing themselves for hardship.

I hate Carlton Fog even more now, so thank you for that. I wish the SOB had died in the finale. What a prick- I suspect, in your storyline, that he betrayed Will to Freed. He doesn't give a rat's ** what happens to Tyler, so who knows why Carlton would have helped Will in the first place. Possibly because Traveler interferred with the gain he was receiving from Hometown.

Oh, it's just so sad! And so not fair. If anyone deserved a happy ending, these two fall in line with Romeo and Juliet. Go, Will, and avenge your love. You'll join her soon, darling.

I am going to be rereading this story over and over, and am simply jumpy at the thought of you starting another. Traveler is absolutely phenominal, and so are you.

Don't keep me waiting! :(

~ #1 Fan and Damn Proud of It, Song

Oh my god. I'm so depressed knowing this is almost over. God. And the last line— oh my god.

I wish it could all end happily.

Fabulous as per usual.

Wow! I go away for a little vacation and find my favorite author has updated not once, but three times! Christmas does come early this year. ;)

Woah. Just woah. Another prank! I love how you have Will training the boys to defend themselves after the bombing; it truly shows the compassion he felt towards them. He would never have killed them, I honestly believe. So I'm glad you delved into that part of Will's conscience. The details about Jay's ROTC training and Tyler's pacifism (which I never would have guessed) really build on the story.

Oh, Will just hates Joseph doesn't he? Not that I blame him, considering he has learned his handler was spinning lies in order to get Will to perform assignments. Even more so, Darian's death seems to have really snapped our spy into serious mode. Introducing the Porter; bravo! Also bringing in the First Recon, I see you've started taking off of DiGilio's ideas. Will's true thoughts of Carlton seem to be getting worse and worse. It's amazing the man hasn't blown up and shot the jerk. Kate! At Carlton's! Oh, that ** lied again. Kate is very much a part of Hometown. What a horror; the next time Will is going to meet her... *sniff* Why could he have just shot Kate AT THE PARTY?!

Oh, Rabbit left! Although I never would have fathomed her becoming more than friends with Will, I did like her (character) very much. Will really got knocked in the stomach, after realizing that even if he has truly been Will Traveler- Chemical Engineer, life would not have gone on like this forever. Jay and Kim would go their own way, Tyler as well, Rabbit has gone to Paris; they would only have been a chapter of his life anyway. I was quite surprised when you had Tyler propose to Nell. Do't get me wrong; I liked her. Spunky, sweet, and strong; she would have been a wonderful wife for Tyler. But after his little escapade in episode seven, I got the impression Tyler wasn't head-over-heals for Nell.

Nevertheless, the thought of him settling down is so wonderful. But it wasn't written in the stars. Especially once Will realized he couldn't have Nell return into the picture after Tyler broke it off with her. It was so emotional to hear him lying to his friend, taking away a woman Tyler probably could have grown to love. And hearing about Jay and Kim having problems was very nerve-racking; at least we can say Will Traveler had a busy life.

Hearing Maya talk about Kim & the boys is adorable! I would have liked to think she did that; that through Will's story she came to like them. Will's spy skills seem to have rubbed off on her. She was even able to advise on how Will would approach the road-trip. I suspected Hometown had arranged the road-trip so that no one would be suspicious of Will Traveler packing all things that proved he existed. But you scared the crackers out of me when Jay and Will were looking through the house, and I even knew Tyler wouldn't be dead. Poor Tyler; anyone could tell he had daddy issues. And Daddy is gonna be the son of a witch that destroys him. He came to rely on Will and Jay to pick up the pieces, which may have been what killed him. Despite being a strong boy, Tyler always needed that little push to get him going.

I very much wish this story wasn't ending, but I do look forward to your interpritation of season two. You are a wonderful Traveler writer, and as long as you continue with these terrific stories, you will always have a cult of fans following behind. ;)

~Song

Poor Will. It’s killing him up inside that he has to do more than just set his friends up –he has to ruin their personal relationships too. You did a really good job with Tyler and Nell’s break up –having Jay and Will discover him the way he did really helps show just how much she had meant to him, how much his false conclusion had hurt him –he must know that she wouldn’t do that, but the idea that it was a possibility…I also liked the fact that Maya talks about them like she knows them, which is what she said in the series, I think. You’ve really done a wonderful job of taking the tiny subtleties from the short-lived show and expanding on them. Tyler and Jay play off each other well, and you’ve portrayed their sometimes-clashing-sometimes-bonding relationship well. Oh, and I love how the reason why Jay agrees to the road trip is simply because it’s for Tyler, and that Kim understands that too. And Will thinks of the castle as “home.” Unfortunately it’s not going to be home for much longer…anyway, great job!

I love this chapter. Big surprise...

I love that poem! It's fabulous. And goes with the chapter well, too. And has an awesome title.

I look forward to more!

One thing: you said "Rather, Will’s reluctance to get involved stemmed from two and a half years’ experience with his roommates’ volatile personalities"; I think you mean one and a half years.

This is fabulous! I'm going to miss Rabbit! Ah!

I love how you develop your characters. This is fabulous!

WRite more.

Oh.My.God.

I am in love with this fan fic! But I always love a good will/maya fan fic.

Totally great writing by the way!

Can't wait for the next chapter...

Chapter 18, already? Wow, I really need to catch up! I'm only up to the first couple of chapters...you're doing great! Of course, that's to be expected from you, Elvie. *winks* I will try to give a more detailed review when I read more of the story, but I am loving it so far. I'm so happy to see that Traveler is still living on in fanfics, hehe.

Once again, a fabulous chapter. The feeling you mention about fear for loved ones, I get that. It's horrifying. I kinda do what Will does— just look for the facts, you know? I guess you must, actually, with you writing this and all...

More soon, please!

This is so fabulous I don't even know what to say or where to begin. It's so real, and you forget the ending while you're reading, you really do. This is absolutely stunning, it really is.

Write more.

Wonderful chapter.

I would never feel comfortable constantly "sweeping" my place. I'd definately reach paranoia, and it's amazing Maya has not. To hear her views on torture is so agonizing to read, to know that it will happen. Also to learn that she, possibly like Will, is worried about Carlton's loyalty (or lack thereof to Jack Freed); it's not easy to be the girlfriend of a government spy. Although I might say it was worth it... I mean, have you *seen* how good-looking Will Traveler is? ;) And Maya agrees: she loves being in love, and if only it wasn't a poisoned relationship.

Holy Crackers! Kate! You definately took me by surprise with her. I never considered the prospect that they had met face-to-face. It was right for Maya to be cautious and call Ellington, although that jackass never sat well with me; he seemed like a guy who was good at his getting the job done... even if it inconvinienced someone else.

Our Miss Maya is jealous! You really like the idea of Kate and Will together, don't you? Maya is a bit foolish though; Will didn't have "lovers". I'm sure he had never been in love before meeting Maya. Anyway, go Maya! Kick Kate's witchy ** and show her that you learned a thing or two from Will Traveler. (As you can probably tell, I'm reviewing as I'm reading.)... Ha! You want lunch sweetie, Maya will show you she knows her town. But what in the world does Kate want to talk about? She may know about the relationship, but she certainly won't say anything to suggest that...

Ready, set, go! Will taught her that! Oh that is so cute! It's there little "thing". Of course, it's lying... but still, it's adorable because it's them! Oh, and look who has the hand in this game now? You are suggesting Kate did not come here with orders from Hometown? Oh, isn't that a twist. Kate obviously isn't very smart: she didn't read the title of this story. If she had, she would have known there is an invisible bubble around Will Traveler, and any woman that tries to break that bubble is going to get her butt kicked by Maya Sanders! (You will excuse my love for defending rightful territory; it's my area of expertise.)

Thanks for addressing the safe-house. We never got to see it, and for awhile it was confusing because the house was not directly defined. Now what could be in that package? I'm sure Kate would have had Hometown check it if she had thought it was important, although it may very well have been investigated. *gasp* Oh my goodness! That's why Kate gave Maya the envelope! *stops reading to form conclusions* Kate knew that Will killed Jericho, so she has the agent send Maya proof Will assasinated her brother in order to convince Maya he was a scoundrel and force her to break off their relationship! *finds composure and stops conclusioning to continue reading*

Will is such a charmer. It is so hard to think of him as anyone but a trapped spy who fell victim to the greatest sickness of the world: love. I've been anticipating Maya asking about Will's former lovers, and I think he passed with flying colors. It's not unreasonable for Maya to question his relationship with Alex and the not-so-relationship with Kate, since there is so little about Will she knows.

Eek, we are getting to the envelope. And the verdict is... she doesn't read it. Oh good for her. This is why I truly believe in her and Will's relationship, because times like these, putting aside the actions that make his judgements questionable, are times Maya surely experienced. And she got through them, because she loves him so. *sigh* How faithfully romantic.

And then she is murdered.

Aren't I a mood killer?

Ack, I haven’t reviewed in a while, but this story has been consistently updated and better than ever. I love how you’ve fleshed out Maya’s character, her reactions and how she’s begun to adapt to this life of espionage forced onto her. You could have written the fact that she doesn’t want to know if Will killed Jericho, that she wants to believe the best of Will as naivety, but it comes across as very human. And Will planning Jay and Tyler’s escape makes sense –that would explain Carlton’s insistence that they take refuge at the Fog home, if the Fourth Branch hadn’t gotten to Carlton first. He and Will had a great dynamic last chapter –you really portrayed the tension well, and didn’t make Carlton out to be this evil, repulsive man –he, too, has both virtues and flaws, and has been forced to make some hard decisions.

I liked Kate’s appearance this chapter, and it’s a great foreshadowing to what she’ll be doing later on…a personal sense of rivalry turns into a business-like torture and execution, laced with motive. I also loved the fact that she tried so hard to be a “country girl,” minus the Prada purse, and that Maya subtly called her on it. She and Will seem like such a fitting couple because they both have such quiet strength. Will isn’t the biggest guy in the world, but he can fight, and Maya can too, in her own way. And the fact that Will knew something was wrong right away –they know each other so well now. Anyway, great chapters, keep up the great work!

Yeah! You updated!

I loved seeing the business side of Will in this chapter. It was particularly amusing to picture him going back and forth about blowing the whole plan over and putting a bullet in Carlton's head. (Which I really wouldn't have minded at this point.) But he's too in control to do something like that; particularly because he needs Carlton's money. "Dance with the Devil" was a well-suited chapter title.

I always feel so sad when I read about Will having good times with Jay and Tyler. It sounds like his summer was so much fun, and I almost wish it had been real. If Maya had truly been Will's high-school sweetheart as he had told Rabbit, I would fully support it. *sigh* Maybe in another life...

And so we begin. The relationship you have built with Carlton Fog and Will Traveler is so fascinating, so... discrete, that it's anyone's guess who has the hand in their agreement. Carlton may be more ruthless, but both certainly know how to negotiate and pursuade. Which is why I was so surprised at Carlton's acceptance of talking with Will. Of course, a .9 millimeter can be very convincing...

The interaction between these two was terrific, and so enjoyable. Carlton clearly thinks Will is in over his head, but Will seems to know that pride means a lot to Fog. Maybe Will does know what he's doing. I can't decide for sure, and I have read this chapter multiple times. Great job correlating Alex, Three Continents Investing and the video blogs into Will's plan; I like cleaned up loose ends.

Uh-oh, Will, are you beginning to warm up to Fog? Dear goodness, I hope not! Don't be fooled, silly boy, that man is a crackpot! The one million dollars was not necessarily a good faith gesture, and it certainly doesn't mean Carlton won't turn around and rat you out like the damn snake he is. Although Will seems to have figured Fog out: I never considered the fact that Carlton despised Freed, but I could see that being so. Carlton likes power, he likes *being* the power, and Jack Freed stands in the way of that... What an interesting twist. You're such a damn creative writer, aren't you? ;)

Of course I look forward to more; I certainly don't have to tell you that. But please update quickly, because I'm going to have to keep re-reading this chapter until I get something new.

Toodloo, ~Song

Wow... This was really powerful, especially considering the chapter was pretty much one long business transaction :-)

The small glimpses into Will's past were really good, the steadily growing feelings of inadequasy. THe idea that he wasn't welcome in 'the only club that mattered' was very well formulated.

I love your characterisatons, I really do.

Ebon Hush