ACE!
Very good storyline, cute, heaty & original. Although I found llie and Gene a tad too good to be true I mean, Ollie has just been told his dad died and he's not even that upset, he's able to comfort Carol and not have a go at her for killin tuckr. If that was me I'd do all of those things, except my dad's an arsehole so I probably wouldn't, but i I had a different dad then I would brea down and make myself look like an insane retad in front of everyone. And some bits were also a tad cringy. When Ben said 'it's not you, it's me' I turned against him instantly. And Carol can get quite clingy also. Apart from that, it ws amazing. Maybe ou should write another chapter where he proposes to her or something, or where the kids walk in on them having sex and turn against them. That would be hilarious. Anyway,I'll try not to be dirty minded. It was toally kewl, I so loved it

This story was great! I loved it.

Keep up the good work!

Aw, what a great story! :D

Gah. Huh.


PLEAASE WRITE MORE.

That is all.

hey i haven't been able to get on the computer for awhile.but it's an awesome story...i really hope you write another chapter

hey that was an awesome chapter ,i haven't been able to get on the computer very much ...sorry it took so long to update but anyway brilliant chapter looking forward to the next one

hey it's a awesome chapter looking forward to the next one

hey that was another awesome chapter.i'm really looking forward to reading the next one..

hey awesome chapter..it was really good.my friend read it the other day he thought it was brilliant..anyway i'm looking forward to the next chapter

great story so far..i really hope the next chapter is cool

awesome chapter looking forward to the next one

hey awesome story so far.keep going i'm looking forward to the next chapter!