I don't know if I've reviewed this fic before, but it is...amazing. I'm a bit curious to know what would have happened if Leon ever showed up, but this also stands as a very powerful two-shot detailing a possible relationship (not romantic) between Auron and Cloud.

I have to say that the final exchange there is just...whoof. That's a punch in the gut, there. Fantastically written.

cool. just, smimply, very cool :D

The very dark yet beautifully described introduction set a very sombre tone for the rest of the chapter. This fic is feels so mature and its not normal to see a fic like this around anymore.

I liked the varying sentence length throughout the whole chapter. Seeming as you wanted to show Cloud's thoughts, the varying sentence length coincides with the thinking thoughts of Cloud. We never think in one big lump, at least I don't. Its always very incoherent, broken up, sometimes long, sometimes short and it's been conveyed very well here. Especially when Cloud fantasises himself in control. The emotion in those few sentences speak for a lot by the way it was written.

it was very interesting to get into Cloud's mindset, to see his confidence fall apart as he took a step closer to the Coliseum. The revelation about Auron was also portrayed beautifully and although the dialogue was minimal throughout the whole fic, by restricting its use throughout the whole story and only using it between their final embrace, it wmade a very poignant moment and you knew it was important, making it an amazing part of the chapter.

As I said before, this is a wonderfully mature fic and you must be enjoying writing it otherwise it wouldn't be such a dream to read! One question, how many chapters are you planning to do?

This is very interesting and quite different. I really enjoy your descriptions and the flow of your writing. You're very talented, and I hope to see more of this fic (and also if/how your quotation of Aristotle will relate to the story).

It's a damn good thing that you're choosing to revisit this WIP. This is fantastic... I haven't seen very many LeoClos that include any sort of AuronCloud relationship, any sort of relationship, that is... And the description is fabulous: just enough, without getting boring. I can't wait to see how this develops.

yay for leon/cloud.

Like you said, this is quite different and a lot more serious than your normal style. (I have read many of your stories but at the time, was too damn lazy to be a good citizen and review. I'm now trying very hard to be very good).

The idea of the story is very original although, to be perfectly honest, I found some of the descriptions too...chewy, if you can catch my drift. Then again, it may be mylac of patience and I don't think I'm in the right frame of mind for type of fic...I'm currently listening to some crazy MTV Mash Up so that should hint how my brain's feeling.

Regardless of all that, you are very talented and its nice to see some new stuff ^_^