Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. I had a lot of fun reading this: The plot was drawn out to a good length and the characterization was absolutely spot-on. Near the end you had some grammar problems that broke the flow a bit, but otherwise it was perfect.

Awesome job!

Well, you asked, so I'm here. I love Jade, though I'm kind of stuck in the middle with Saphir. I love how annoyingly feminine he is...I'm not sure whether that means I like him or not, though...o_O Whatever.

Anyways, I liked the smoothness of the fic, and how Jade's personality is watered down, but still, well...Jade. The only minor error I saw was that in the game, it's said he was 'adopted' by the Curtiss military family to earn his status, not that he signed up for it. But that's so minor, it shouldn't really matter...

So, great job, and I hope you write more TotA stuff. ^_^

-Puppy

Wonderfull! ^^ You did a great job on this.