Could have been longer. I was getting into it :(
But right now, I'm just reading all your stuff! :D

bravo!
great fic!
i kinda got teary eyed at the end :p
it was good and sweet.

This is a great story! It's so interesting to see these things through the eyes of a hired gun, and you do it really well. The whole looking at his shoes thing was played well throughout, as was the fear and general wariness of the mugs towards their boss. I like the depiction of Harley as naieve and inexperienced... of course, she was all new to this whole game, she wouldn't have known anything about it! It's nice to see it addressed and I love that she had to be taught how to shoot. I think her inexperience would've been something Joker would've found cute at times... and infuriating at others... we get a limited perspective, seeing this story told just through White's eyes, but his personal reactions to everything is very interesting. And I love Joker's possessiveness and how they're all aware of it, even though none of them ever really see him being nice to her. Great job!

Congratulations! A great story, very enjoyable, kept me all excited and filled with anticipation of updates. (..which is a really bad sentence but anyway...) Yes, very good, all the OCs were great characters, I got rather attached to them. Nicely done! Brava!

But the irony of a man, who survived for so long by sticking to his system, ending up dead because he changed WOULD be a very compelling tool towards any author. I can see why your Beta would think this. But then you had Henshaw end up like that, cause he didn't leave like he usualy does whenever he picks up the ire of his boss, so I guess you got Irony right there. Still not as obvious as White's end would have been though.

The end of the survivor...

Ah well, I think it is good you ended thi one. Make no mistake, it was unique and decent, but I felt at the end it was getting tiresome for more of White and Harley. This way you finished it before it turned bad, and thus kept a good story. With a unique concept. This is yours, no one else has it, and all others from now on will imitate you.

Your ending it in the next chapter? NO!

Aw, poor Henshaw! I liked him. He was a bit dim, but a good sort. **pats Henshaw** That was very well done, I particularly like the bartender's reaction.

AAH! *runs and hides* Nyahahaha.

hi, to lazy to login.

OMG! "I NEED YOUR LIVER?!?!?!?!"

DAMN! That was awesome. But yes. poor poor Henshaw.

Gah! I...

Wait a minute, that made me HUNGRY?!

I'm sitting here mourning for Henshaw, and thinking, "What I wouldn't give for some liver and onions."

I'm...going away now.

-3.0

"Which one is the liver?"

"The big one."

I don't know why, but that had me giggling like mad. It's just...perfect. So casual and unconcerned. You're good with the small touches.

-3.0

again: eek!

I'm so glad you updated this so soon after the last chapter, I love you for that :) haha

Can't wait to read more! xx

It's my own softness that's making me whimper for poor Henshaw (I liked the oaf...), but my love of all realistic fanfics keeps telling me to shut up. This is a Joker fic; people are bound to get hurt. At least no one can ever say you place attachments to OCs before the story. And yet...*whimper*

Well it couldnt peachy prefect forever, Now could it? Well it could. But where's the fun in that? Tehehehe

ek!