On the whole I like this, though it does tend to get a tiny bit bogged down with description. I can't say I noticed many actual errors though, except in the 'Prologue' chapter where there are a couple of spelling and grammar glitches, for example a couple of places where it needs punctuation: "Airi and Aram, Jeile had been with them.." could do with a semicolon after Aram. But all that is me in beta-mode. Just being picky!
I am intruigued by the stranger but I personally could have done with a little more clarity in his POV section, or perhaps another paragraph for him. I'm also instinctively wary of OCs, though they can be pulled off well - I'm sure you'll manage it.
Anyway I am interested in this story. Thanks!
Super x

I HATE it when that happens... LOL. Good luck tracking down your friend and getting your stuff back, and I can't wait for the next update. :)

Addie

i love razu.
hahaha
so please update soon

I love your wonderful vocab
and descriptions.
but you seriously need to space the lines more or something, my eyesight is horrible and you're not helping putting all those little words together, i mean my god.
Nice chapter though...

Wow! It's...It's...I don't know but I love it XD Please, continue the fikk >.< I'm not english and it's a bit hard 4 me reading (& writting!this XD)it but I really liked it ;) I'll be waiting 4 the next one ;)kisy

dude
you seriously need to talk to you
i'm tired of only having
crazy colleen to talk to
i'm going insane

now that that's out of the way
i really think that this has
a good possiblities
so hurry up and actually write more
than three or four
chapters this time!