:) haha, well written, riverunsthroughme was right, this does sound like a good promise. By the way, do you think there are more female fanfic writers? i seem to think so.

This...is great. I really, really like this. I truly love this story. Heck, I'll even be your beta if you haven't found one already. Though to be truthful, I don't really see much to correct. A couple of mistakes every chap - big deal. My story is much worse...though that is probably due to the fact that I last updated it about...3-4 years ago? I wasn't nearly as good then.

Anyways, there's a small mistake here:

"It should have hurt to hear him say that, but it didn't. Because, weighed down as she was by all of the bloody Suna nin, Tayuya knew Kidoumaru was putting their chances for an alliance on the line to protect her. More than that, she knew that if she had been guilty and she had deliberately risked said chances, she wasn't worth protecting, not when they'd all fought so hard to help Suna rise, phoenix-like, from the ashes."

It says Suna. But it should be Oto, no? You might want to correct it, though you'd have to be mentally handicapped to not realize it, so it's no big deal, nobody will be confused.

Anyways, not much to add. There is nothing really that feels like it should be different. Pretty much perfect. Though, saying "In next weeks episode" when you haven't updated in nearly a year is kind of...funny

A good day/night/week/month/year/life to you!

I have readthe entire story up to now in the course of three days and am hooked! I hope you update soon, exspecialy since we were left with a cliff hanger.

Always,

Amber Goldeye

...It's good. Keep going. What else can I say?

Aah! Secondhand Faith is back! *dances around in glee*

Seriously, you have NO idea how happy this makes me. I actually did dance when I saw the new chapter...and then speedily re-read the whole thing to make sure that I remembered the plot.

Oh lord, where to begin?The mood in this chapter left me breathless. You wrote everything so well, and angry-Naruto? Very, very scary. Geez, I'm on pins and needles waiting to see where this goes next...Thank you for the chapter, and good job, as always!

(Also, Ino's jutsu was very cool. Did you make that up or is it canon?)

…Wow. Very harsh chapter. O_O. Naruto is PISSSSSSSED. Wow. Kyuubi-pissed. I’m not surprised. Not at all. But duh! NINJA! Genjustsu! HELLO! Just because you see a person does not mean it is that person, ninjas do all that illusion shit all the time. But because this is Tayuya, no one will give her the benefit of the doubt. Tch. Well, except Kidoumaru. He knew it was not her. But how will he prove it? Well, at least non of the main characters died, it would have been BAD if Gaara had died. Hoo boy, Naruto would have killed Kidoumaru to get through him to kill Tayuya if that had happened. And poor little girl. But the Lord of the Fire Nation is dead, and that will hurt. But….ick. You better update soon, lady, I want to see where this goes. Thank God Kidoumaru is a genius.

Oh WOW! XD That was her problem. She is not one for the cuddles. She is the perfect match for Kiba.

BAKI? XD *laughing hilariously* Oh who? Anko? XD

…OMG! SAI! I bet you had SOO much fun writing him! XD OMG. He is so hilarious.

...Oh holy crap. Well, I know that wasn't Tayuya...but, um, whoever did that...wow. And nobody is going to believe that that was not her...oh wow. bad times, bad times. O_O

Did you copulate? OH GOD! Only Sai! *laughing very hard* OH wow. And I loved the scene before that with Tayuya and Sakon, and Kidoumaru and Ukon. And then, woot, Tayuya actually kinda listened to Kidoumaru. XD

Oh wow. Well, wow. Kiba got his say in, and made Tayuya have to take a look at how much everyone lost, not just the Sound. And then...bow chicka bow wow. XD But then Kiba had to get all chivirous and ruin the mood. *laughing* And now Kidoumaru got his say, and Sasuke is a dick, as ever. Good chapter.

Oh wow. Kidoumaru is PISSED. I would be too. They experimented on Sakon and Ukon, WITHOUT antithetics (O_0) and held them prisnor for so long...Kidoumaru is...gonna do something. I can't wait. And seeing Tayuya 'comfort' Kaede was kinda cute. It was awesome that Tayuya and Kidoumaru got the chance to see Sakon and Ukon, and will see them again probably. This was another emotional chapter. Very impressive. I'm all sad and shit now. But I am very. very impressed with you consistent good spelling, good grammar, you always keep everyone in character...this seems cannon even. You are good. :3

OH WOW. O_O MOST epic fight scene EVER. You write them VERY well. It was like watching it. VERY impressive. Very epic. And yea Kidoumaru saving her. :3 And Oh my…O_O Sakon and Ukon alive and seprated? O_O DAMN!

…Happy…bunny? *choking on laughter* You, my dear, have a great way with words. I applaud you. “And then he realized he was staring at a man dressed in green spandex. And died a little inside” OMG! I laughed so hard! XD Laws of Lee. OH WOW. This second section was just brilliant and hilarious. XD

O_O OH wow…..damn. Poor Tayuya. Poor Seiichi. Is the water still in the stadium? It hasn’t drained? I wasn’t sure, but I guess the stadium is still filled with water. But wow. Tayuya is….probably gonna have a fit. Loosing a genin like that….

This chapter was sorta painful to read. The emotions...wow. That was vivid.

Lol, Ino…..And Sasuke and Naruto….XD I never thought Sasuke would be the Uke….er….*wide eyes* Ummm….*changes subject* So…..Tayuya! Tayuya has a thing about heights. Might have something to do with half a forest falling on her….

And then Akumaru comes to say hi. XD And awwwww, Kiba is such a…..um…..man-whore. *snickers* But at least he’s going slow with Tayuya, that is, surprisingly…ok, not so surprisingly, decent, intelligent. He does know how to deal with feral beasties after all. XD

Wow, good fight. XD Tayuya trained him well.

Lol, ok, this chapter was epic. XD Kiba’s got balls. XD And I love Kidoumaru and Neji’s interaction. This is when I thought it would be epic to get Temari, Tayuya, Kidoumaru, Neji, Shikamaru, and Sasuke together for genius/really intelligent peoples stuff. XD That would kinda be interesting. “Sometimes, you just needed a decent genius to talk to.” That line gave me the idea. XD And Kidoumaru’s reaction is awesome. “Or Deaf, is he deaf?” XD lol And woot! Go Temari! Molest Shikamaru!

Wow. XD Kankuro is…wow. He’s such a sneak. Neji is like ‘merrow-hiss’. XD Inside his head of course.

Lol, I can just picture them glomping all over Tayuya. XD So adorable. And I bet she loved it, just wouldn’t show it. And she was so possessive over her teammates, it’s sorta sweet almost. At least she has that much, well, not affection, comradely? And aw, I just love the idea of her having a kid. 3