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| foxygirlchan 2008-07-19 ch 1,  | abuseAw, cute! Very nicely written! You have a talent for one-sentences! I love all of these, but they got progressively more melancholy as they went along. Which suits it very well, seeing a when you delve deeper into many stories or relationships the ending result is usually laced with pain. Anywho, it'd be nice to know if Basch survives, but I assume he does. He saved the world from a tyrant-king who almost became a god. You don't just NOT survive after that. Anywho, great job! I loved the story so much! Keep on doing what you do best! Adios! |
| love-unclaimed 2007-11-26 ch 1, | abuseI read this on your LJ, but I thought I'd leave a comment while I'm here. I love ALL of these, but if I had to choose favorites, 37 and 42 particularly. At first I didn't know how I felt about the 1 sentence fics, because I'm one of those that likes long, drawn out stories...but I came around to them. I think the word prompts are a great way to stretch the imagination too. I'm going to try some of my own soon because they are very approachable unlike an epic novel that would send me running off in the other direction ^_^ Can't wait to see more of your marvelous work! |
| sarasa cat 2007-09-09 ch 1, | abuseI just fixed a few minor typos based on Aqua's much welcomed comments. Many thanks! |
| unwinding fantasy 2007-09-08 ch 1, | abuseThe contradictory nature of Never is superb -- it sums Basch up as well as a single sentence possibly can. Vaan's determination to safeguard Penelo in Sudden brought a smile to my face. However, Torn has to be the best of the collection because it's just so darn angsty but beautiful at once. Also love the description of the two, "a man carrying the troublesome responsibilities of a kingdom" and "a woman who smelled of sea spray and wild flowers". A few nitpicks: - In Motion, it should read "awnings" (plural). - In One: "...would be misconstrued [as] a noble..." - In Attention: "[a] guttersnipe girl" - In Ghost: "...but when she turn[ed] towards him..." Aside from that, the only thing that actually read awkwardly was Hunger. At the very least I think there should be a semi-colon in there somewhere because it's a bit too run-on, if you know what I mean. (1sentence is nasty like that. Long live syntax abuse!) Thanks for the lovely read. I'm not a huge Basch x Penelo shipper but you made it too sweet to resist. ~Aqua~ |
| Zaz9-zaa0 2007-09-05 ch 1, | abuseI must say, I'm growing more and more fond of this pairing with every sentence... ;) |
| Statik 2007-09-05 ch 1, | abuseGreat sentences! I wish I could state which one is my favorite but I really have too many. I liked the way you portrayed their relationship in a more intimate way. It really shined a different light on the two. Amazing job. |