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| Phantom Melody 2008-09-28 ch 1,  | abuseAwesome! |
| bookfreak13 2008-05-24 ch 1, | abuseADORABLE! ^_^ Good job! |
| ThumperMiggles 2008-05-11 ch 1, | abuseOMG! Cutest AU I've read. Ever. |
| Drifting One 2007-11-09 ch 1, | abuseAw! That was so cute! I loved it! It was perfect! OMG! *dies from the fluffiness* |
| Mandanza 2007-09-15 ch 1, | abuseAdorable. A truly sweet story. I don't know what else to call it. And Aion is nice too :D |
| Nixariel 2007-09-09 ch 1, | abuseI like it. I like it a lot. They're so CUTE! Honestly, I quite like what you've done with this idea. There are a couple things I'd like to point out, though. Please don't take offense; this is most emphatically not a flame. Rather, constructive criticism. 1. Be careful of some of your descriptors, i.e. "mouth-watering," "tantalizing," etc. Thay are wonderful words, but effusive descriptions can be just as bad as skimpy descriptions. 2. Is "She" supposed to be capitalized in "Once, there was a time when She was an hour..."? I just wasn't sure on this one. But it's really a very minor, nitpicky kind of point. 3. "doefully" I think you either want to go for "dolefully" or "woefully" here, but not "doefully." Whether you woke up at six or simply stayed up until then, this kind of thing is just for obsessive nitpickers like me to care about. Don't sweat it. 4. Using "pools" as a synonym for eyes. This is more of a personal choice, but I find the use of "orbs," especially "crystal/crystalline orbs" as one of the most abused and therefore tackiest descriptors out there. "Pools" is not much better than "orbs" in my books. 5. Why "Elysium?" It's awesome that you know at least a little about ancient Greek mythology, but it is ANCIENT Greek. "Heaven" would be more apropos of the time period, and especially for Chrno and Rosette. 6. Last one, I promise. "Russet" is a darker shade of red. So, what kind of funky chocolate (I'm assuming it's supposed to be chocolate) icecream is red? Again, this is not intended to be a flame. If I have offended you, I most sincerely apologize. However, this is the kind of criticism I would want to get had I written this. I hope you can take that as a compliment. Overall, this is a very good story. I hope you write more. Toodles! |
| Zilleniose 2007-09-07 ch 1, | abuseAbsolutely adorable. Everything about this had me smiling from the moment I began reading, with the humble yet enticing "slice of life" setting. Almost every fic in the CC category is (expectedly) epic or dark, so it's refreshing to see a little jewel such as this pop up now and then. |
| Synonymous Brian 2007-09-06 ch 1, | abuseAww! That was so sweet! I love these kinds of fics, y'know, fluffy and cute XD Great job! Keep it up! |
| snekochan 2007-09-06 ch 1, | abuse*Squee!* Fluffy! With ice cream! ^-^ I loved it! (Nice of Aion to play match maker too!) *Squeals!* Thank you so much! This was so sweet, and I thought Chrono was in character, and...(Blathers on) Anyway, / I really like it! love to live and live to love, Snekochan! |
| Angelbreed2121 2007-09-05 ch 1, | abuseAAW! SO SWEET, I WANNA CRY! AW |
| demon-boy-chrono 2007-09-05 ch 1, | abusethat was so nice write more |