The story was good. I think it would have been a better read if the grammar and punctuation were correct.

Try to make the story flow and have more filler. It seems that you followed the show somewhat then quickly trailed off. Instead,consider improvising a little more and adding your own flavor or spice to it. Thanks

This is a great story. I think you have Brendas and Fritzs characters understood and very well written. I absolutely love the quote from the last paragraph in the story saying "southern women are enigmas." brenda definately knows how to poke a bear and knows how to realize her mistakes and apologize for them. I thought you did a good job with writing Brenda's accent.

Great story! I hope that you will continue to write more Brenda and Fritz fan fiction.

JAC
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