yay! you seem to only get better the more you write. tis very nice. i would leave a proper, in depth review, but im an hour behind on work since i was totally unable to tear myself away from your fic. that should tell you how great it was, and i hope you continue it.

woaw!! AWESOME! write more plz!! ^_^

i can't wait for the "several" one-shots to arrive.. :)

I love this story so much. Please give us more.

so cute and sweet! awesome smut, even if i prefer the positions the other way around..>_>; theres just something i hate about ukelight..

have you thought about have a one shot to this story line were l and Raito have finished the paper work and started field work, they are down on earth were they are having coffee or somthing and one of the people from the kira case sees them and starts to freak out.



arrowmist

Freaking. Made. Of. Win.

Wow. The table thing was the funniest scenario I have ever, EVER, ever seen during a sex scene. That was bloody brilliant.

And that quote! "You're so damn sexy when you're fucking me." That is the BEST line ever, and it worked! xP Even while letting L play seme, Raito has to have some control. x)

it's perfect!

“You’re so damn sexy when you’re fucking me,” Raito said in a breathy whisper.


BEST...LINE...EVER! I think anyone who read that line and DIDN'T have a total spermgasm must be dead below the belt. I am a happy girl for having read this.

**applause**
Very good.

L is damn hot and sexy in this chap.

a gread read! ^-^

I definitely like this as a one-shot! It's fun, and consistent to the characterization you've created for these characters. I still don't think they are especially OOC to their canon characterization anymore, but I do feel they're in-character in regard to the storyline that you've created and the way that you've chosen to evolve them as characters. So I guess it is probably well into AU by this point, but really, this whole Meifu arc of yours does lend itself nicely to more one-shots, and I hope you continue to write them. It's nice to see the two of them working through their issues in a more... productive way.

Ah and while Light is my favorite (especially as Kira), he definitely does deserve a bit of torture, particularly at L's hands. Kira-flashbacks, L's prodding barbs, and bending over for L (...although I suppose he liked that a bit too much for it to be reasonably deemed torture) - he's got it coming! All in all, an enjoyable and satisfying one-shot.

Ooh this was good! I also like the idea of Raito having a "Kira" side too. The following one-shots are going to be... interesting. *raises eyebrow*

This was really good, you make them very in-character and well, you gotta say, love the sex. They way you portray their personalities and feelings and relationship is done really well. 10/10!

I... I don't know if you can have any idea how gratifying the begining to this piece was. What I've wanted more than anything for the Death Note series, more than L somehow coming back alive, more than Raito to stop and step back and realize what he's done... what I've wanted more than anything, ANYTHING, was an appology.

I'm actually not even done with reading this yet, but I've been re-reading -“I killed you…I…killed you…” Raito chanted, each syllable broken by half-choked sobs. “I’m sorry…I’m so sorry...Oh, God, I’m sorry…”- again and again, and my chest just HURTS for how much I love it. The first time I hit the line I just stopped in shock, and it was like this flood of emotions just... just RELEASED, and after a time I realized that what I was primarily feeling was so much RELIEF, so much closure...

Sorry for the cheesy, overdramatic analysis of such a little thing, but thank you. Thank you SO much for writing it.

The rest of the story was wonderful too, of course, and I loved every word of it. Their emotions and personalities were let loose, and it was so wonderful to see them playing off of eachother with such raw, exposed feeling. This whole piece carried a sort of feel of redemption and admittance to it, and I really really really can't even begin to tell you how wonderful I thought it was without resorting to incohereht babbling and praise. More than I am already doing, at any rate.

The end has me a little worried, though... Kira's gone... right? I just... I didn't feel quite comfortable with the slight sense of foreboding I got with the last paragraph or two of Raito's musings. Or maybe that was just me reading too much worry into everything, as always? Oh well, like you said - only time will tell.

Thank you for writing this, I really enjoyed it, and I hope you decide to continue this little story arc.