Good AU with a sound education even if few teen could survive sch a rythm in schooling (learning is a lot harder than working even if basic schooling is slow, your designed education planed is more than fast, especially concerning language masteries atop of the rest, magical must have a better constitution)


very enjoyable story

great story

its a nice story

lol, I SO want to go to that school! Go drunk leprechauns!

wonderful story-am going to read your others now

i liked the idea and certainly the school you set up, but the story itself was a rather dry read. sure, there was some stuff on harry's thoughts, but on the whole it read like a history narrative; lots of time and place details, but very little on the characters thoughts and development.

Awesome story, just like with Naruto's Compensation (one of my favorite stories) you get to the core of the story without going on about shopping trips and such that can cause many people's stories drag on for longer than they should. My only complaint is I didn't fine this story sooner, wonderful work.

great story! it's always nice to read a what if story. especcialy one where Harry doesn't go to Hogwarts. like I said Great story!!

Love,
Jo

again, i absolutly loved this story! you have such an amazing writing style and are so good at story telling. i loved it all!

Very great story. I like it.

There are some holes in this. But. It is a lot of fun to read.

Dumbledore is more than a few fries short of a happy meal and watching him lose the few he has left is great. Your solutions for Snape, Quirrel, and Lockhart - delicious.

Hey. I'm just stopping by to say that I really enjoyed this story. I haven't read any 'Harry Goes to A Different School' Fics where he switches from the get-go before this so it was a little different for me but certainly not a bad different. As I am starting to ramble, I thank you for posting this story and bid you good day.

"Sensible. I know a bit about that man, too, and I wouldn’t want him around children either, particularly prepubescent young men, if you catch my meaning."

Oh, and I was so enjoying it untill this little peace of gay bashing...I catch the meaning far too well.

The writing quality is decent, though could use a little more detail to make things more immersive. Well, that's something I think of 95% of fanfics on this site, so it's not bad, and your style is clean and functional, so really, you're far above the average for ffnet.

Some of it is a bit dry in execution.

However, what I am most pleased with in this story is that Harry basically leaves Hogwarts and lives ok and studies hard, with most of Dumbledore's disintegration being self-inflicted. Harry is not constantly plotting to undo so-and-so's schemes, he is not acting like a Machiavellian spymaster, he is still fallible and can be knocked out from behind.

It gets tiring to read stories where Harry Potter is continually self-righteous, infallible, and smarmy, and relentlessly works to humiliate an unfailingly stupid and persistent Dumbledore.

In your story, there's some plausible reasoning about why his thinking started to come apart in the first place as a side-effect of the wand, and Harry isn't nearly as offensively correct and god-like as he sometimes gets in stories like this.

You also don't get side-tracked by cool ideas or witty banter - you have a disciplined approach to cutting out irrelevant bits. Too many times I've read otherwise fantastic writers on this site who get obsessed with certain concepts or archetypes and they totally lose it, either rewriting every single character's personality into their favorite super-soldier fantasy ideal or turning their favorite characters into mouths for their own authorial rants.

So, in summary:

1) Stylistically, you could refine your voice a bit more to help immersion. For example, some of your characters are not memorable - can't put a face on them when I try to imagine the scenes.

2) Concept-wise, not all that original. But you do a decent job of making it work.

3) The best part of your execution in this story involves the things you are leaving out. No long rants justifying author's reasoning about why Dumbledore is this or why magic should do that. No long stretches of clever dialogue between meaningless side-characters. I find this level of restraint in an ffnet author of your skill level refreshing - it happens much too much to writers once they get good enough to feel confident in tossing in pretty flourishes and spend long hours thinking up needlessly complex plot logic.

Nice story ya got 'ere Doc.