i would like a sequal pleasE

This is so dreamily satisfying. Even phrasing that normally seems cliche to me works here, like the idea of David's life being so disrupted by a boy who "eats spaghetti-ohs and says 'ain't'". I guess it's a distinctive form, an old narrative style that I'd never seen applied quite like this. Charming, in the best sense of the word.

wow...this was really good. I love the style of writing you used and you wrote the characters perfectly. Absolutely wonderful job!

~Spirit

that was FANTASTIC. definitely the best fic I've read in a while. a long while.

Wow--the last part of this chapter (actually, the entire fic) is made of complete, utter amazing.

Loved, loved, loved this story.

You captured the personalities of Jack and David perfectly - bravo!

Alright, so I know that I'm supposed to review every few chapters or so. But I could /not/ tear my mouse pointer-thingie away from that 'next' arrow. So kill me.

Truly a great read. : D
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I've decided lists are your specialty. Write a grocery list, and I will review it. Lists are trickier than people think -- they're all about pacing. Yours are always smooth and surprising.

This finale is definitely the perfect end cap to echo where you began. Like the dramatic tradition you've followed, our heroes face an uncertain future, but the fact that they are together leaves us feeling satisfied.

My best to you (and the boys). Mega love, M. Thanks for writing!

I admit, at first I was all, "Um, why're we learning about Jack's car?" You'd think after 10 chapters I'd just be willing to trust that it's going somewhere awesome. And indeed, it was.

Interestingly, you don't tell us where the boys are going -- and I'm glad, because the more important thing is the fact that they go, not where. Yet another example of your excellent sense of what to leave in and what to leave out.

Also, your seemingly non sequitur details are so good and cute I want to cuddle them. "Humbler, slower, and more like to refer to maps." "Burnt-out letters on the signs of all-night groceries... pale, freckled faces." Again, deliciously quotable.

i really like this so far. It reminds me of the book Breakfast of Champions by Kurt Vonnegut, the way it describes everything until it is seems to be so plain and simple.

Oh, I loved this so much. I wish I would have started reading it before it was almost over. I lovedthe way you formatted it, and it was in character and...sigh. Wonderful.

Way to come back to the opening theme here, "For the near-first time in his life, David is wishing the future didn’t matter. For the near-first time in his life, Jack is caring about what will happen in a time further away than next week." Oh no, change! What will our heroes do?? Please know I tease because I love.

Also, you are infinitely quotable. Case in point, "Even in the most beautiful of moments, David cannot expect Jack to be any less than himself." Funny and sweet and important characterization all in one. Nice work.

I'm guilty of reading this far and not reviewing but I'm enjoying the way you write the characters and tell the story so much I just had to let you know. What great fun you must be having. Thanks.

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