aw. poor hermione...but i love the fact that it's a sad story--not too many i read. good one shot!

o_O
it needs a lot of work.
it sounds like a 4th grader wrote it.
it kinda sorta sucks.

oi kabayan! ang kulit ng simula, hehe, keep up da good work in writing!

Ohh... this was a sad story. I enjoyed it though! : )

That was soo good!
And really sad. *sobs*
I loved it! :)
Great job!!

lovelove
Amanda

Sad story. A bit more description would be better. I like how Draco appeared after the funeral and said he had always loved Hermione. Well done!

aww..that's so sad! You should somehow make her come back to life.

...UH?
Sorry, but this really wasn't much of a story than just a description of the HP ending supposedly.
Try adding more details! "Plot" is a magic word! Love your characters! Want them to live! Make it interesting!

This is so sad... I' crying, so if I make any mistakes tat is wjy... i can't see properly...

Clare x

sad

THAT WAS A GOOD IDEA BUT IT WAS POORLY WRITTEN...KEEP PRACTICING

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISM WARNING: I think your story was kind of sweet, but Hermione was thinking typical Dramione-ishly. And that's definately not what you think when you're about to get murdered. I wish you could've went into more details about Ron's and Harry's conversation after Voldemort was defeated. You could have written from both Draco's and Hermione's POVs, like when Draco saw Hermione murdered, and so on. Bellatrix's POV I don't really care of, but it would have been really interesting to see what she thinks when Draco suddenly changes sides - before he Imperios her, of course. I really hope I helped... and this if only for your improvement... see, I hated contructive critism too until I found out how helpful it is. Don't take me as an insufferabe b* for sharing my opinion with you, though. Don't think that had be fair, do you? Just ignore my review if you disfavor it.