What a vivid picture you paint. Love the running commentary in her mind. The dress, concern over Mal - interesting, but I never thought of how the doors opened before - I always thought River opened them, but I don't think she would go back and pose afterwards. I always wished they played out that scene. River/Summer is so beautiful/graceful during her fight scenes - they are a joy to watch. Great job on this short!

Now that's some good action. :) I see this is consistent with River's statement that she'll be all right after Miranda.

Seriously scary. I like the way her concern for her ruined dress intrudes on her thoughts as she's delivering the wrath of God to her opponents. It reminds me of the way she shot the three men at Niska's skyplex, as if what she was doing and what observers thought she was doing were two entirely different things, although they achieved the same result.

Oh. My. God. I loved it, your characterization of River was perfect and the last line was awesome. She was arrogant too. :D Brat.

That was good I almost wish they had decided to try to kill her to see how she would have gotten out of it. I do have one problem though with the way she fought. Probably her biggest advantage over fighters like the opperative is that she would have been able to look into their minds and seen their intentions. This is what would have enabled her to take on a horde of reavers where even the operative would have failed.

I missed this somehow when you posted! What a compelling fic! I'm fascinated by the voice you give River She's very difficult to write, and you're doing a wonderful job of it! Eagerly awaiting more!

that was really good

Poetical violence is the best and you have written it beautifully. Unfortunately that's all I can come up with.

Thanks for writing.

That was an awesome look into River's mind during the battle with the Reavers. I liked it. :D

This is very powerful. I don't think I have ever read this scene written better.

I especially like the way she analyzes her weapons as soon as she acquires them.

Another great story beautifully written! I can't wait to read more. I'm not normally a fan of first person stories but this was written with grace and style.