This is really good. Love how you had this written. Love the interaction between all the characters, especially Janeway and Chakotay, it was amazing to see how the story evolved. Great job.

I wish that it didn't end. This whole book is really REALLY good.

This chapter made me cry so much. They whole story is amazing.

Yeaa1! ALL DONE! Good job!

so do I get a reward for sticking with this so far? :-D

You're right I'm never talkin' to you again. hmpfh! :-D

You're story is very well written and awesome. I'm really enjoying it.

While the start is slightly let down by the fact that we ‘dived’ directly into the plot with Janeway trying to rescue her crew while helping the Oncaveat rather than seeing how “Voyager” got involved in this mess from the beginning, it does create an interesting edge of drama due to the questions that arise as a result, and the Jehnz-yin come across as easy-to-loathe villains very well in an effectively abrupt manner, even as the questions about the Oncaveat’s motives and abilities- such as this ‘failsafe’ you mentioned- raise even further questions.

If nothing else, the Jehnz-yin’s sheer arrogance in assuming that every race they meet MUST be like them biologically made it clear that they had little real interest in exploring or learning more about the universe around them, making them automatically opposed to “Voyager”’s ideals and motives by their very nature, even if subsequent revelations regarding the nature of their old ties to the Oncaveat made it clear that some of them had greater depth than others.

Janeway’s near-death experience and the encounter she had in the process seemed a bit pointless, but the subsequent twist of the role she was forced to play for the Jehnz-yin civilian population helped to make up for that, and her dealings with the new chancellor made an interesting- if disturbing- contrast to her experiences at his father’s hands as she found herself confronting someone who actually ‘admired’ her in a twisted manner.

However, in the end you’re let down by one simple fact; you skipped over the final fight scene.

I can understand if you don’t feel comfortable writing inter-ship combat, but when you went from the meeting with the new Jehnz-yi general to “Voyager” undergoing repairs after the battle, it gives the impression that you missed a chapter and couldn’t be bothered going back to fill in the blanks (And I still feel that the ambiguity of what ‘John’ is let you down somewhat).

All in all, your general plot was good and your characterisation was interesting- particularly regarding Janeway and Chakotay’s relationship-, but you could have benefited from including more details in certain areas.

Epic! Incredible! I'd be more specific but, as usual, you kept me up quite late. I have looked forward to reading this every single night for the past couple of weeks. On nights that I couldn't get to it, I was thinking about it! LOL! Now that I've finished it I'm a little sad. I loved every mintute of it! Keep Writing and Thank you!

I've spent the past few weeks reading this incredible story, so I apologize for not taking the time to individually review the chapters, but I just didn't want to stop and take the time to write anything if I could be reading another chapter instead.

While I was a little frustrated to see how many chapters you dragged out the torture of Janeway, I still understood why you did it and how it was necessary in the grand scheme of things. I won't pretend I wasn't excited when it was finally over, both for the sake of the character and for my sanity, but it was well done overall.

I'm also very pleased how you handled the Janeway/Chakotay potential relationship. So many others fling them into an intense relationship as if that's the only way it can be done, but your way is actually true to the characters, and it was great. Thank you so much for such a wonderful story.

That was a very powerful heartfelt, and emotional novelett. Thank you so much for uploading this wonderful story. I admit, when I first read it, it was a little drawn out, and I didn't understand some of the plot in the beginning, however, after re-reading some of the chapters a second time, it started to make since. Thanks again and I look forward to reading more of your work.

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Wonderful ending Shadowtheory. You tied in every important piece I had hoped you'd tie up. The way you skipped straight to the settlement dealt with Rimmaz's situation and the Oncaveat.

I also liked how you brought in Edward Janeway because he did play an important role in the middle of the story in regards to the Janeway/Chakotay relationship.

On the two, I thought, for a moment, you might leave Janeway and Chakotay be - that is as Captain and Commander; and that would have been very acceptable just because of the way you described love using that Jehnz-yin chocolate-smelling vegetable. But then you chose to get them together which was a nice ending for the two and us readers. It's funny how they almost act like they were children with the way they talked. It's cute.

Overall, a fantastic job you did with this story! There was so much in this story to deal with and you managed do it, and well. Thanks so much for writing and congrats for finishing!

Harry finally expresses himself to Janeway. Neelix's line, "...it might not be him [Harry] I'm worried about this time" really shows us how angry he really was with her. Months after and he's still holding it against her so strongly. Imagine the tension on the Bridge. It would have been interesting to see. Hehe. Still, I'm really glad they're working it through.

Harry's angry at her for rescuing him first? I kind of get his point, since Neelix was under so much pain when he was being beaten. Still, he really should talk to the Captain about it instead of avoiding her.

I just have to say that Rimmaz is disgusting! It sounds like all he has on his mind is that. And what kind of person says: 'You caused the death of my children, now I have to make more?' It could be that he's just trying to hide his true feelings, but really?

With that last scene in the Ready Room, I didn't expect Janeway to pull out a cookie to persuade Chakotay. Funny.

Sorry for not reading/reviewing sooner. I'll be back for the remaining chapters!

Very very good, proffessional standard in my opnion, loved it!

This was a great story. I read it start to finish and it held my attention the whole time and even had me wondering what happened mext. You kept the characters just about in character and the characters you made up seemed like they could have come from the show itself. Well done and keep up the good work.