That was awesome! It was so sweet!

Ahh! That is so cool! I love the story of an angel who brings Anakin and Padme together and who helps Anakin realize what his deepest desire truly is. And the little angel in the crowd disguised as the "wise child" - a very clever ending! I loved this story, it was so well-writen. Nice work!

This was...beautiful! It brought tears to my eyes. I loved the ending. Going in my favorite!

I loved the story from beginning to end. It reached out and just grabbed out and pulled you in and never let go. The way that Vader is described shows very well why it always felt like he wanted something more but why he couldn't grasp it. The ending was superb. The only thing I found a cnofusing was the people on the planet and how only few would help.

Wow. Just wow. I am left speechless, and with tingles running down my spine, after reading that. In my opinion, that was an excellent representation of Darth Vader, and the tumultuous mental state he surely experienced. You said more for his character in one page than "Dark Lord: The Rise of Darth Vader" could say in hundreds.

Though I do seem to remember reading this, or a similar story to it, before. I don't know if it's just Deja Vu, or if you've published a more mysterious, less fleshed-out version on TFN or somewhere before.


Also, you don't happen to post on the GameFAQs Star Wars board, do you?

With this story, the author stands on the doorstep of greatness. All of the elements which make great authors are represented in this story. I'm not kidding.

The only recommendation I have is to attempt to round out the two characters in the story. True, Vader is well represented, as is the angel (whom, I might add, we only get references to in the movies), and yet, for all this, Vader is shown throughout this as being more of an unsettled character. I realize that this is the whole purpose of the story, but for those who know Vader, it is hardly a full representation of a character who is far more troubled more deeply inside than is shown. Still, this is an interesting take on the Dark Lord. Keep in mind what readers expect, and use that as your base (not to say 'write only for them', but more to try and exceed expectations, not just meet or avoid them). Only do that with older, more beloved characters, though. Like Vader.

Still, that was well done.

Delightful! Not the behavior one would expect from Lord Vader(rescuing the girl from the vine), but possible early in his darkness. A nice turn at the end.

Really nice way of exploring Vader's angst. Good work.

that was so beautiful

i liked it. really good work!