Reviews for Missing Charmed Version

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lovestruckbabe243 2008-07-20 ch 4,	abusegood!great story! Please update soon!
running in circles 2008-07-12 ch 2,	abuseNOT DR. COX! ANYTHING BUT THAT
ShadowWolfDagger 2008-05-28 ch 4,	abuseAwesome Charmed story, can't wait to read more and see how it all plays out. Please update it soon ^_^ ~Tala~
guardian music angel 2008-04-27 ch 4,	abuseplz update! this is so good!
xcharmedgirl4evax 2008-04-26 ch 4,	abuserealli good!! looking forward to the update! :D
charmedtomeetyou 2008-04-25 ch 4,	abusegood job :D
lisa 124 2008-04-24 ch 4, anon.	abuseWow! You finally updated. Good job. Could you please update sooner this time. I kind of want to know what is going to happen.
artsfan 2008-04-24 ch 4,	abuseOkay, the story IS developing, but there's a lot of stuff I noticed that needs improving. Understand that I'm not trying to flame; just help. There were a few general spelling and grammatical errors. They didn't bother me very much, but it took concentration away from the story. In the chapter before this, you said that Chris was glaring through the bars of the cage. If he had no emotions, he shouldn't have had the will to glare. Also, essence and emotions are two different things. Essence is kind of like your core or soul, and emotions are what you feel. The two are linked, yes, but if Chris had his essence taken away, it would have been like he was dead. He still would have been breathing and stuff, but his soul would have been gone. If his emotions were gone, he would be emotionless and calculating. Also, Piper wouldn't be fretting this much. She's the kind of kick-** witch who would save Chris, and then fuss about what a horrible mother she is. She wouldn't let it overwhelm her like this while Chris was still in danger. She'd save him; and then fret. Leo, also, would worry about saving Chris first. Concerning Phoebe and Paige, it's a little hard for me to "see" what they're doing. You focused too much on their conversation, not their surroundings. We need to be able to "see" more of what we're doing. The spell was also a little off. Maybe try writing different versions of a spell before deciding which one to use? The premonition was well-done. You write Chris's surroundings very well. About Will. You may be carrying him from another fic into this one, but I think you should still explain who Will is. Try putting in a bit of his back story into this fic, via a flashback or something. So there is my review. I hope you find it helpful, and update quickly.
criminally charmed 2008-04-24 ch 4,	abuseI'm sorry, but leaning towards "Girls (and Leo) you ARE a bunch of idiots." Hello, who is forever wandering around the underworld making himself into a huge demonic target? Why that would be Chris - a witchlighter of Charmed blood, same as Paige and Wyatt. And no one realized the reason he could be incommunicado (I so spelled that wrong, didn't I?) was that he was the one captured? And welcome back to the story, BTW.
Sailor-Lit 2008-04-24 ch 4,	abuseGood chapter! Cliffie, much? Update!
WickedNut 2008-03-16 ch 3,	abusePlease update soon!! I can't wait to see where you are going with this! Jenna
Minxmessenger 2008-03-13 ch 3,	abuseHope you update soon
Good Witch 2008-01-03 ch 3, anon.	abusePlease update this story soon! It's a great change of plot!
solo23 2007-12-09 ch 3,	abuseawesome idea!! i can't wait to find out what happens
artsfan 2007-12-07 ch 3,	abuseThe story seems good so far, but it's a bit confusing. This is what I don't understand: - Chris is tough. This demon would have to have a hell of a lot of power to capture him, but the demon seems weak. Even by demon standards. -What episode is this after/ in/ before? I don't know if they know Chris is Piper and Leo's son or not. Veryy confusing there. -When you use 'O' to say 'Oh', there's a slightly different meaning. It's very slight, but 'O' can also be a kind of exclamation point at the beginning of a sentence. Like it adds an extra umph to whatever the sentence says after. 'Oh' is the normal 'Oh' we use in daily conversation. I'm not flaming, I'm trying to make things clearer for me. There is no harm intended. Sorry if the review's too long. You have an excellent story. Update soon. artsfan

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