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| mudstalker 2008-07-29 ch 14,  | abuseGreat story! You did a good job with the opening dialogue. Stick with it! |
| PichiKeen 2008-03-19 ch 14, | abuseOk here's the deal: I read all of the chapters in a couple of hours and now I don't feel like leaving a detailed review on every single chapter, so here is a detailed review of the story as a whole. I loved the fact that Shawn was still being a smart ** while being held hostage. Completely in character. Original character designs concerning the villans. I sympathized with them and yet disagreed with Danny's methods. Try to mark where the scenes changes or shifting points of view, otherwise it's confusing. Be careful with your sentence structure. Sometimes your sentences are long winded with multiple subjects and verbs. Just don't lose that sense of sentence variety! Some of the lines in this were literally laugh out loud funny. Keep up the good work! :D |
| silverluna 2008-01-27 ch 14, anon. | abusecool story |
| criminally charmed 2007-11-21 ch 14, | abuseGood whumpage, well paced. It was a good read. |
| dean'sdreamingangel 2007-10-13 ch 14, | abuseAwesome ending. And that's sly Shawn, getting ur dad to bring the boxes over. :) |
| ImaSupernaturalCSI 2007-10-11 ch 14, | abuseAwesome. Loved the Henry and Shawn moment at the end. Great story...can't wait to see more! |
| DeanParker 2007-10-11 ch 14, | abuseand how long will that not arguing last? five bucks on no more then a week after shawn has recovered! UPDATE! |
| FanFicFreak-33 2007-10-11 ch 14, | abusethis was a really good fic...i love it when shawn gets kidnapped, injured brutally, and then found cause no matter who writes it, he always still has a smile on his face and that awesome sense of humor i love so much. excellent job with this one |
| medicgirl 2007-10-11 ch 14, | abuseThis was such a good story! It was almost like a real episode, except for the fact that fpr some reason, they never let shawn actually get hurt. I would love to see this on the show! Great job. |
| Resurging Crisis 2007-10-11 ch 14, | abuseAw, what a happy ending. |
| PsychFan81692 2007-10-11 ch 14, | abuseI'm so sad it's over!! Anyway, I can't wait to read your next story!! |
| HPSmallCharm29 2007-10-11 ch 14, | abuseaw that was such a good ending!! i love this story so much and you did such a great job on it! i can't wait until your next story!! |
| YaoiFan87 2007-10-09 ch 13, | abuseOMG! Poor Shawn! I was on the edge of my chair when Jordan was in his hospital room! Shawn should have let his Dad beat the crap out of that guy. LOL ^O^ |
| ImaSupernaturalCSI 2007-10-09 ch 13, | abuseI kept waiting for Henry to beat Danny senseless...oh well, this way doesn't end with an assault charge, not that Lassie would've said he saw anything, anyway. I liked the end of the chapter. "How on earth did we manage to live together for seventeen years?" "Beats me." |
| DeanParker 2007-10-08 ch 13, | abuseha ha ha...I love the bond between Shawn and his Dad...They are Perfect!! Update... |