I was a tad confused but the rot part in parentesis () at the end made it almost completley clear. Just, the fact theat it was in parenthesis threw me off. But I got it, I can't believe he died! Sad...

I'm a tad bit confused by parts of this. I got from the begining that it was Ed's funeral, but I can't decide why Winry is so calm about it. I'm going to guess that your making her seem so overwhelmed with grief that tears won't suffice.

And where's Al? Shouldn't he be mentioned? What happened to him when Ed died or did he die before Ed?

If you still want help with this one I'd be glad to help you, all you need do is ask.

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EdElricFan1001

Sad! I would like to know where Edward has been, and what happened to Alphonse. I love how Winry's idealistic view of Hawkeye is the center of the piece. It is a very unique concept! Awesome job!

That was a pretty nice story, though the last line left a grim aftertaste. xD;

For some strange reason, I didn't think that is was Pinako who died. o.o Though I didn't think it was Ed. I accidentally skipped a part or two which were deceiving. xD

Yeah, well, I guess you got the desired effect out of me. That was CRUEL! I didn't care when I thought it was HER funeral, but HIS!?! He's too awesome to die! ...Okay, seriously now.

"Perhaps all she sees is a six-foot trench, with her greatest God buried inside."

That was absolutely BEAUTIFUL. Stunning. Amazing. Wonderful. Perfect. Whatever the heck you want to call it. But it really was.

...But how could you kill him? He's not meant to die! And where the heck is Al? Shouldn't he be at the funeral too? Or is he dead, too? (Please say he's not. He's really, really, really not meant to die. He's too adorable.)

That's exactly what I did, I thought it was pinako's funeral, and when I saw it was ed I was just like "Oh snap!" and re-read they're conversation. XD

I enoyed this.

Actually, I thought it worked out well...'oh shit, wasn't expecting that character to be the dead one' was pretty much my reaction. Very interesting, unique idea.