hey i love ur writing it is very pure, i hope u do put ur stories back up:) if u keep on fighting u will eventually get there, please eat more, does ur school know that u cant make it somedays? i'm sure they'd understand
ur very brave, i wish i was xx

Gare de Lyon. I sympathize. I have a family that puts the fun in dysfunctional too. I'm 44 and right now my nephew that's 19 is staying with me to go to college because his psyco mom kicked he and his sister out of the house as soon as the youngest turned 18. They had absolutely nowhere to go. Your going to need some help. Talk to a councelor, minister, teacher, aunt ,uncle, somebody. Does the school know why you can't get there? You're only 15- your going to need some help. Heck I'm over 40 and some (most)days I need help. I'm sending a cyber hug your way. Best Wishes. Crystal

This was an interesting point of view and it was full of strange little details that made it seem that much more believeable. Great work!

Wow this was really interesting and good. I liked it, the plot the writing style...
Good job!

i liked it, the metaphors and what not. it's not totally original but a cool perspective. boy on boy love whilst in a straight relationship is so deliciously taboo. but really the point of my review is to preach: i wouldn't mess with lovesick friends in denial, speaking from experience!! the post-revelation gets quite troublesome...

Ah, this was delightful. I can pick out some syntax errors, but, hey... who am I to judge? >> I have terrible grammar. And that daliberate bit about denial, yeah... toally didn't understand that until you left that note.

As far as firsts go, I'm extremely happy! Wonderful job!

Wow... I'm so glad I read this - you really got me thinking! You do some things like I do, with brackets and italics and question marks, etc., but it was still a bit of a challenge to wrap my head around some of it - interesting style! :D

This part: "...like a wire coathanger had been shoved down his throat." caught my attention. You carried that description on well: "The twisted metal turned molten..."
All of your descriptions were effective and let my mind imagine all sorts of fun metaphors and images to go with what I was reading. Good work! I'd encourage you to keep that up :)

This was also REALLY good: "Nothing constant about the mercurial yoyo caving in faithless leaps into the dark, because…hell, what was there supposed to be to have faith in before the jump?"
I love the word 'mercurial', by the way. ;P

However, I don't understand what you mean by: "...midnight hair as he even told her that he loved her was how real his love was for Her was his love." Be careful to keep as clear a meaning as you can - you have to remember that the reader doesn't know what you're thinking. Even when he/she reads what you've written, your words are subject to the interpretation of the reader.
Not picking on you, don't worry! :P I just know that I appreciate when people point out things like this to me, so I do it for others too. :)

Also, when you post something, it's good to double check how the italics and bold and whatever else have turned out to make sure that it's all set out as you want it. I don't know how many times I had to delete and re-post my first one just because something kept turning out wrong. I'd read through and go, "Crap. That's not right." And because I'm weird like that, I just HAD to re-do it. *grin*

I'm also a little confused about the "jump" mentioned here (because I can never decide between literal and metaphorical meaning - I always mesh the two together somehow 0.o And yes, I know I'm weird that way, too :P), so I'd really really really like it if you could maybe (please? ^_^) message me back to explain that part to me. I'd love to know what YOU meant and not only the way I see the ending.

Thankyou for sharing this! I honestly liked it and I'm a fan of descriptive writing - effective images here. :)

And thankyou also for reviewing 'Shirts' - reviews mean a lot to me.

~Miss.Yamapi.Kara