wat-to-go!plez more!! i hav to see what happens next!

Sweet. Now he calls her Orihime after I write my last review.
I feel like a jackass.

... Why does Ichigo still address her by her surname?
They're going out, so shouldn't he call her Orihime?

ok when you said it snowed "an inch" of snow and called it heavy?, an inch? as in single? that qualifies as...not enough to cover the sole of your shoes. ok maybe a foot in the first 25mins of the snowfall, that would be considered heavy, but a freaking inch! not even check some of the weather patterns for Alaska, and then rethink what is considered a heavy snow, damn even japan get's more snow than an inch.

Wow, you have a new fan! I read the whole thing and I really like your writing style. You make me laugh a lot and you even scare me sometimes...lol...so consider me one of your biggest doodettes to make a long story short

Sigh, where to start? First off, I love the pairing, however I do have a few comments about your writing style. But before that, your invitation in your profile to flame is very tempting, but I'll restrain myself.

First off, and this is something that a lot of Fanfic writers struggle with, the characters aren't really in character. It's not as bad as some fics I've read, but it could still use some work. Also, the interaction between the characters is two-dimensional. I'm not sure myself what I mean by this, but basically their interaction doesn't quite draw me into the world you are portraying.

Also, it would be a good idea to separate the character's thoughts from the prose. Italics usually work pretty well. Also, try not to write their actual thoughts too often. It usually helps the flow of the story better if you describe their thoughts and feelings in the actual prose. That's what it's there for after all.

I know it's a long review. But you did ask for criticism. I hope that this was constructive. Though I could still take you up on your invitation to flame, and say something like 'It hurts to read your story'. But I'm not going to.

...What?

I'm glad you found a creative outlet. Just keep in mind that the better you get at it, the more fun it becomes. And that's it from me.

Hurray for long, preachy reviews!

just to let you know im screaming right about now! I love this chapter update asap please pretty please!

Wow... You have an excellent way with words, the story kept me enraptured throughout and I hope to read more soon

i lovve wearing my mans clothes. xD!
you feel all cuddly and everything. anyways great story. i love it, even tho renji...:cryin: he lost rukia! well update asap!

This fanfic is awesome. I have to say, it kept me at the edge of my tall seat! =) Next chap please... =)

YOU MUST CONTINUE

Hahaha.
Girl :]

DOD BEST FUCKING STORY OUT THERE! IF ANYONE HASNT READ IT YET YOU GOTS TO!
WOW. THIS FANFIC HAS FREAKIN EVERYTHING
THANK YOU SO MUCH RANDOM HERO!

AW!
That cha[ter was so cute. Funny too.
I cant wait for the next chapter! They have all been so good.

Hey. I love the pairing among all bleach characters, by the way.

I'd just like to comment about the lack of punctuation marks. And I think that if you were to make an excellent fan fiction you should improve grammar and parallelism of your subjects and verbs.

At first, one couldn't really understand some of the conversations because the clauses and sentences don't have any punctuation marks that separate them to show the meaning properly. And some of the shortcuts you made with words should be avoided.

But the storyline is really cute! =) I loved it. I often read IchiHime fanfics since I like this pairing more than IchiRuki. No offense to Rukia fans, but I don't like Rukia that much and I don't think she's very pretty. This is just an opinion. Well, please make another one. I'm looking forward to it. Your imagination is nice and the way you tell the characters's point-of-view and their feelings. Loved it.

Good Luck on future works. Hope my review helped.