Grim but needed... Even a kids show needs to at least have fanfiction reminding us that life isn't always a fairy tale...

it wont be flamed lolz its good

weel right hand salute for kim possible and for u

good night

from the netherlands

FREEDOM!

That's awful Warhok killing Kim in front of Ron who's incapacitated! I sense that Ron sees what they've done to Kim as the most horrible thing a person would do to such a person!

I wonder, did they decided to keep her graduation gown since they want her to look the way she did before they killed her, or is she naked? I can imagine Warhok ogling at a dead, stuffed, and mounted naked teenage girl! If she's naked, then that, combined with the snarl on Kim's face, must make her look like an inhuman savage!

Anyways, I enjoy reading this. Good work!

Wow that was very powerful story

My eyes were moist at the end. I've been a Kim Possible fan for only two and a half months and am not ready to see her die just yet.

touching but leaves so many questions unanswered from the set up

nice and sad... at least the aliens got their dues.

Wow,pretty harsh ending there.KP dead,stuffed and mounted as a war trophy two months after graduation.Ron hacking up the Lowardians like a turkey at Thanksgiving.Were you really pissed at someone when you wrote this or what?

Kind of freaky. I dont really like these kinds of stories. But it was good. Keep up the good work

Whitem - I read this when you first posted it, and just now a second time because I wanted to give it consideration before reviewing. This is a strong story which begins to address a situation in which Ron had no choice but to kill. But it could benefit from a thorough edit and some cutting. My peeves:

- Warhok in his _office_ at the outset. It's too banal - sounds like you're setting up a classic KP-style humorous contrast between expectations (a la Hank Perkins in "Sick Day" - what evil villain hires a _temp_?). Warhok in his lair, or throne room, or command center - that sets the mood. Office doesn't quite do it. Though maybe the banality is what you're going for? Then you should think about doing more with it.

- The 2nd paragraph of Warhok admiring the work on Kim. It's not necessary; the 1st paragraph is sufficiently macabre, and the 2nd paragraph just tells us again that she's stuffed. Perhaps you just wanted to solidify for the reader that she's gone and not coming back. Still, I think it's a little heavy-handed.

- Warmonga's urgency vs. Warhok's calmness about Ron's approach. Warmonga is concerned and assumes that Warhok knows exactly who she's talking about - but if Warhok did defeat Ron so readily, what's the big? Meanwhile Warhok doesn't seem concerned - and yet he knows exactly what kind of devastating force Warmonga is talking about. Should he express surprise that Ron's back, since he clearly wasn't too concerned about letting Ron live? I just found this kind of confusing.

- The Lorwardians regrowing their limbs. Too mechanistic. Ah well, it's as if you're saying, Ron has no choice but to kill them because they've got superior weaponry or battle armor or whatever - except in this case it's replenishable limbs. Frankly, Ron's dismembering a living foe is plenty horrifying enough and raises sufficient moral questions that your _forcing_ him to kill them in this way doesn't add much to the dilemma. You should just let him kill them - not out of rage, but out of his sure knowledge of the continuing destruction they'll rain down on earth (not to mention the complete amorality they show by mounting a sentient creature as a war trophy).

- Ron's wink and Gene's smile at the edge - kinda kills the mood for me. It's a nicer ending, somber and meaningful, without that.

Perhaps what I just wrote is what people call a "flame"? I hope not - just trying to seriously engage your story and write the kind of review I wish that people wrote me! I want to add that it's a very readable story with good descriptive passages and good lines, and which, in a short space, addresses serious issues worth writing about in a plausible and heartbreaking way. A good answer to that big debate over at Z's forum. I just think you have a little trouble sustaining the mood.

(And I note that all 18 other reviews disagree with me, so feel free to disregard!)

Best,

RH

To take a life is consdiered to be one the greatest sins anyone can commit, but it sometimes is the only solution, especially considering what the aliens did. Nice one-shot. I wonder what happened to Shego and Drakken during the battle. Maybe now, Ron can start dating Yori, seeing that the Possibles, especially Kim, would not want him to mourn. If you give any of my stories a read, review and tell me what you think.

Wow. A little surprised that Sensei would encourage this, but it had to be done. The ending was a real heartbreaker.

Excellent.

MK2

PS: It's in the Running... ;3

A well written, poignant story. Certainly a plausible alternate ending to the battle in Graduation. It reminds us that sometimes a pure heart and good intentions are not enough to carry the day. Sometimes to protect those we love and that which we hold dear we must use do that which we normally abhor.

Like so many young men before him you place Ron in a position where he must decide whether the life of his enemy is more valuable than the safety of his loved ones and the protection of their freedom. Once the decision is made then comes the hard part; living with the consequences of his decision.

Readers may wonder had Ron employed his full power and the blade in the first battle would the second have occurred?

The tributes at the end were fitting and proper. The only thing bothering me a little is the idea that after all Kim had done for the world, Ron wound up paying for her memorial. Or perhaps that's how he wanted it.

Whitem,

You wrote from the heart on this one. A tragedy that would make Shakespeare proud. You have an amazing gift in your ability to key emotion of the heart to your written words, followed by action, conflict, resolution, and peace. I have only seen this ability two other times in literature though there are probably more. You leave much to the imagination and while your description of the moments could be expanded, it still is sufficient to enable the reader to visualize what is happening. In some ways that can add to the story, in others detract. As the writer you are the best one to determine the effect you are seeking.

Thank you for the read. Keep up the good work. Stay true to your writing style. You have the gift, continue to use it well.

john of jakt