please! I just love your story so much! just please...update and continue this story!

Wow I love how well your description for this story is and also how identical you matched up the story to the real plot line of Kingdom Hearts. I love how this story gives us the readers the chance to see what might've happened if Axel took Roxas with him. I'm glad that Demyx is on their side, Demyx rocks! I can't wait to see the next chapter of this story and I hope you keep up the good work!

Your writing style is absolutely breathe-taking. It's very refreshing from the rather bland styles of other writer's on this site. And your idea is one I've often wondered about. What would happen if Roxas left with Axel? All in all, awesome.

Wow. I quite like this story a lot. I do really like pretty much all of it. The Demyx and Zexion!Heartless are cute additions, but I really like the moments when Roxas and Axel are trying to relate to each other.

I think the whole thing is quite well-done, even your combat. And of course, I'm still tremendously confused about what exactly is happening, but I suppose those things come later.

Also, I do like the exploration of the fact that the Heartless and Nobodies don't get along, and in fact have differing goals / agendas.

Anyway, glad to see such a high-quality piece of work. Can't wait to see more.

I loved everything about it–this is a really, really, interesting spin.
Twilight Town and Roxas was always of interest to me, but the short amount of time you actually got to play as Roxy was always so unsatisfying. I really like the added in bits–it fleshes out the plot and Roxas' character. I'm a little bit confused at the restoration thing though–I never really understood it. If Roxas' was learning more and more as he meets people, wouldn't the restoration decrease, or at least slow? I'm not calling you out on it, but rather the game. I haven't finished playing Chain of Memories though, either, so maybe the whole memory switcheroo thing is described in more detail there. Eh, whatever.
Really like where this is going and excited to see what happens next, though.

Wow, I gotta say when i first started to read this fic i was really confused about what was real and what wasn't and what Roxas remembered and what he didnt.

But soon i got to be on a roll and I gotta say i am really enjoying this plot twist that you did to the original canon.

I can only hope you will keep writing this and if you do please let Roxas remember soon i feel so bad for him being in the dark like he is.

Again Great fic, enjoying it so far immensely!

I'm really enjoying this so far, the Axel/Demyx dynamic is certainly strange. And the Bookmaster thing is cute. I keep thinking of Zexion squashed into the shape of a little heartless. It makes me go squee.

I really liked this chapter. I really like the way you wrote Demyx and the heartless, and it's really cool that you put them in Traverse town. Good job, and I can't wait to read more!

I-I don't even know what to say. Your story has got me on the edge of my seat. It's ... amazing. I'm interested where you're taking the story and the outcome of Axel rescuing Roxas and all that.

I'm looking forward to the future chapters,
Good luck!

I'm really enjoying this story! I love how I feel like I'm in the game, just things are turned around and turn-out different. It keeps me guessing! Can't wait for the next one. =]

I just finished reading the whole thing tonight, and I have to say, this entire fic is brilliant. It's a very interesting divergence from the canon events, and I love the way you characterize everyone. The idea of having Zexion's heartless come along is so unique, too.

I really enjoy reading Twilight and always look forward to an update. Thank you very much and I hope that manybe you could answer some questions. Will your story now stray away from the original storyline presented in Kingdom Hearts 2 or will certain stuff stay the same? And what happened to Sora, will he be seen again? I hope so. Also I love the Bookmaster for Zexion, that's so awesome. Will the other Organization members show up. I can't wait to read more.

wow this is rly good and the chapters are rly long so thats good!

i have a question tho... why couldnt roxas summon his keyblade with the heartless? did u mention it and i just didnt catch it? eh.. nbd

i hope u update soon!

I'm totally in love with this fic! I adore your characterizations; it's so rare to see an IC Demyx alongside well-written Axel/Roxas, from my experience. And your writing -- it's comfortable. I don't know how to explain it, but it's not too simple and it's not at all pretentious, and I'm finding it perfectly satisfying in diction and structure. c:

Awesome job! Faved and alerted. ♥

That was great. I loved how you portrayed Demyx in this chapter. I could just see him crouched on the crates above Roxas while dripping water all over. I really enjoyed that description. I also liked how you fit in Zexion as a Heartless. I had been wondering how you were going to manage the Zemyx while upholding the story prior to where you started what with him having died at Castle Oblivion. Have to say I think the way you did it was genious. I don't quiet get why Roxas still doesn't remember though. You probably won't tell me anyway until it comes up in the story though. Anyway, love to you for the awsome chapter. I can't wait for the next one to be posted. Bye.