the plot is good, you write well but there is no flow, it is very disconnected .. Do not save words, write write write, then remove the excess.

i'm sorry i haven't reviewed before now the storyline just made me want to keep reading. love it thank you lots for the hard work!

okay im confused is anthony like renesmee did he stop aging? and whos this ella chick?

lol in the summary you said this could never happen in the Twilight series. I know you wrote this before Breaking Dawn, but you weren't too much off.

good

great story! good job with it! :)

wow i guess you were not acctually to far off huh :), i was thinking of your story wile i was reading breaking dawn, i was like hmm this sounds like a fanfic lol

im so confused...

great job though!

I've enjoyed reading Bella and Edward. I very much liked the plot and the writing. And I thought Bella's powers were very original. That's hard to do and I applaud you for it. I am excited to read the next in the series and hope it comes soon. :)

very good story keep on writing more!

this story was wonderfull i actually almost started crying when jasper was holding anthony. great story i cant wait to read more!

jordan

lets hope its me

love jasper! Love where this is going. Now off to read the rest of it!

love the story bur em who is ella and I'm getting the impression that anthony did not want to become a vampire? is that true. pleas read me story approaching dusk the revised addition.

OMFG THAT WAS SUCH A AWSOME STORY whos Ella?