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| chili-peppers 2007-09-16 ch 1,  | abuseAww, that was so sweet! I really enjoyed reading it :D Great writing. |
| fatkat 2007-09-14 ch 1, | abuseAw, that was so cute! My Grandma used to tell me that the thunder was God bowling too, I loved reading that, brought back a lot of memories. Great fic! |
| Mrs.Lindsay Messer 2007-09-14 ch 1, | abuse"Umm... why are they shouting? Because using an exclamation mark at the end of every sentence leads me to believe the are shouting or at least exclaiming excitedly over something." Exclmation points are not shouting. If I was to make them shout it would be caps and I would point it out that they were shouting. The baby was gonna stay awake until the storm was over and exclmation points are a sign of happieness. Besides I'm guessing you didn't read the word...Lindsay whispered. Like...omg I won the game!! |
| nyakattia 2007-09-14 ch 1, | abuseUmm... why are they shouting? Because using an exclamation mark at the end of every sentence leads me to believe the are shouting or at least exclaiming excitedly over something. Which they would not be doing if they were trying to get their baby to sleep. Also one exclamation mark is usually sufficient, two is going overboard. Most (if not all) of the exclamation marks in this story could be removed without damaging the story. Also the ones remaining (if any) would have greater impact, thus negating the need to use more than one at a time. Good luck with your future writing. |
| audaciousblonde 2007-09-13 ch 1, | abuseVery sweet family fic. Thanks for sharing such a nice story. Great work. :D |
| godessgirl 2007-09-13 ch 1, | abusethat was so sweet |