First off, Nanashi surrouned by fluffy snow, now I want to draw that. I'll try water colours.

Secondly, it was just downright adorable. I've been longing to see Nanashi with someone other than Dorothy because they are so..."predictable" [for lack of beter word]; kudos to making a character who can make a relationship unpredictable...in a good way. Egh...let me refrase that, I liked the fact that I didn't totally know how Nanashi and Cam would act in a given situation.

All in all, great characterization, great idea...sad...but still a good and shaping story.

Amazing story! Nanashi was perfectly in character! Well, um, I don't relly know what else to say, Werewlfof Fire kinda said it all . . . but I really liked it, good work!

Okay... Before I do or say anything else, there is one thing i'd like to exclaim: Holy mother of Christ, you're alive! I was kinda worried you'd be gone forever, just seeing you about the place made me several kilograms lighter! *death hug*

Now, to the story:

Your description's improved so much! I'm so proud and happy! You've painted some very whimsical, lovely pictures with this fic, I'm rather in awe. "The minute felt like an eternity." is an example of what I'm talking about. Well done for doing as great as you have. My only suggestion would be to describe the setting slightly more. What you've got is great, now use metaphors and similies to help us imagine it. Was the snow fluffy, like cotton balls? Or was it sleek, wet and hard like white stones? That kind of stuff.

And Nanashi's so in character! At first (as you mentioned yourself, he is a playboy) I was thinking that his love was a little overdone. But I continued to think about it as the fic progressed and found that I loved his actions. I wonder if people really are like that when they love someone? To not see a single fault in them? You've got a good grasp of Nanashi and I envy you for that, I loved the part at the end when he spied the blond. It sealed his character as in character! XD

Now, about Cam... My first and foremost comment was going to be 'Your OC's a Mary-Sue' (especially at the hair-cutting scene), but alas! The story was from Nanashi's POV and he was struck by love, and Camomile's kicking up the snow in a bout of unsportsmanlike conduct threw that out the window. Though I'd do something about the hair cutting... Seriously... Why would she have kept it long for so long and then hack it off? Why not tie it back? It'd have to annoy her some other time. But, that minuscule fact ignored, lovely, simply lovely.

I'm going to nit-pick now: Why are there question marks where there should be commas? Is your computer mucking up, because they're everywhere and they really put me off (just swap them to what they're supposed to be and we'll be fine then). Also, the paragraph with the community's mumblings over the cafe: each person's speech should be on a different line:

"Like."

"This."

It's too confusing otherwise.

Anyway, overall I enjoyed this. I can see how much you've improved and I'm really glad to see it. Your description's lovely, your ability to write an in character, love struck Nanashi is admirable and your OC is believable for an OC being described by an avid suitor. This is purely awesome work.

- Woffy