I feel like i'm reading a draft. .
I'm interested how this story will turn out. .But it needs improvement. .
maybe you can make the two betray serenity somehow on their own free will. .
i'd love to see how serenity will handle that. .^^

I'm not trying to be mean, but if you're going to use Japanese words in your story, try to spell them correctly. The silver crystal is called the "ginzuishou" and the word for lover is "koibito." (I'm also not sure if that's normally used as a term of address...)
This is a good start for getting the reader interested. It makes me wonder what will happen next... and what is Haruka's disturbing secret? o.o I agree with the other reviewer, it would be great if you wrote out what Michiru's letter said.
Hope you will continue this!

~Yume

m... I liked it but why Haruka a guy??

omg how cool is the story
please update soon
can't wait to read

When I finished I thought 'what the hell?' But I can see how it could be good. I'm just wondering one thing why did you turn Haruka into a guy? Other then that I can't wait to finish! (Oh and just a suggestio write out the letter that Michi sent. PLEASE. I'm one for deatil) once again i can't wait for the next chapter.