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Reviews For: How I Feel

Tsunade Baa-Chan 2008-03-27 ch 1,	abuseMan great start can't wait 4 next chapter
chanel.coco.numba.fiveee 2007-11-20 ch 1,	abuseYAY! a nejisaku fic!! update soon!!
xXSeiren-HimeXx 2007-11-08 ch 1,	abuseNice start! I wonder what will happen on the mission? I really love all your NejiSaku stories! ^.^ Please write more soon!
wendyr9 2007-09-29 ch 1,	abusesorry! thought i did review. haha! it must've been late then. so far it's cute. ^_^ and well written. i can't tell you enough how nice that is. lol! a story could have a great concept but be so poorly written that it looses something and then you don't want to read it anymore. i want to read more of yours though! plus neji is just so damn cute. XD
Anilmathiel Greenleaf 2007-09-29 ch 1,	abusecool idea. love Neji's character, i'd make Sakura a bit more mature... and i really liked the ending actually, about the glass part lol i just liked it a lot. looking forward to the next chapter! Ani-san
Choonks 2007-09-18 ch 1,	abuseway goo d^_^ im loving ur descriptions and story line ^_^ write soon pls
Kokoryu 2007-09-17 ch 1,	abuseHey!, I read your review and decided to check it out. And I am so glad that I did because this story is awesome! I wish I came up with the plot, but you know what? I think my next story will have to do about Neji and Sakura pretending to have a relationship for their friends benefits. Mikaelah
mademoiselle anna 2007-09-16 ch 1,	abuseIt's a start. I would suggest that you do not cut the dialouges in different segments or stick them in the middle of a paragraph.You have relatively good vocabulary and I can tell that there is an effort to be descriptive. But the descriptions tend to have little or no transition and come off as choppy. The relationship between Sakura and Neji comes off as a little too fast in my opinion. Maybe it'll be better to slow it down, let them unravel their feelings in time. I do notice small phrases that stand by themselves. It's a good technique for emphasis, just don't overdo it with unimportant descriptions. There were more substance in the beginning, but the end came off as a little too bland and forgetable. You have style, you just need to focus it at the right place. Embellish where it needs to be embellished. Every scenes should have something to offer to the overall story. I honestly did not care much for the Shikamaru segment, it felt very out of place and unless Shikamaru offers some revelation, the chapter could definitely do without him. So I guess to sum it all up, the dialouges need some revapming (ex. "Blah blah blah," he said NOT "Blah blah blah" "blah blah blah" He said.) You need to foccus more on the important aspects and not go off on other things, when you're writing a scene ask why the story needs that specific scene. Don't waste your time describing something for the sake of space filling. The Neji and Sakura relationship- SLOW DOWN. But you really had no mechanic problems, spelling and grammar were great. Good vocab and all that other good stuff. Just tighten up your plot a little bit. So that's it, have fun writing, Neji and Sakura is a wonderful couple and you'll learn to shape them as time goes on. Maybe I'll pop in when the story is well on its way but I honestly don't read stories, much less to review them. And I'm not sure about completely "retiring" just an extremely long hiatus. I've been silently writing another NejiSaku but I'm not planning to upload it anytime soon, less pressure from reviewers you see.
SpeedDemon315 2007-09-16 ch 1,	abuseHeh, another NejiSakura fic of them deceptively playing as married couple. Those are getting to be quite popular... Don't get me wrong, it's not a bad thing. Not at all. I'm just making an observation. Great start, it will be interesting to see what the Akatsuki are up to.
xxFreezexXxChillzxx 2007-09-15 ch 1,	abuseI'm glad Dei-Dei-Kun is still alive, but besides that... THIS IS AN AWESOME STORY! Please Update soon!
Loversflame 2007-09-15 ch 1,	abuseaw cute update soon okay i cant wait to here about the converstion between neji and Sakura about being married this is way cute lol love loversflame
KAKAxPAMExNEJI 2007-09-14 ch 1,	abusehi!! i like it!! i love the nejisaku!! they do a perfect couple!! please update soon!! you write so good!! bye ^-^
Flower of the Desert 2007-09-14 ch 1,	abuseYAY! I loves it. Keep writing. nudges half-neglected chapter under rug Until later!! Ja-ne! ~Flower
charmed-chan 2007-09-14 ch 1,	abuseyay! Neji-kun -hugs neji- update soon, it was great!
BlackElement7 2007-09-14 ch 1,	abuseYay! New story from Shadowsakura-chan! I don't usually read NejiSaku, but this looks to be a good story!

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