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| Dree 2007-11-07 ch 13,  | abuseHey, I'm glad you finished this. My one comment is that you should watch your verb tense. At the end of Ch 11, for instance, you alternate between present and past. It's a bit jarring. Likewise, at the end of Ch 13, you jump around in points of view. One sentence starts with she and ends with we. |
| Marshmallows rock 2007-11-02 ch 13, | abuseaww poor harry! *reads the first line again!* IT"S OVER?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!? blast x |
| Marshmallows rock 2007-10-28 ch 12, | abuseright again miss smith, right again. poor harry :( you'd better update this soon PG otherwise I'll die of suspense, and my fanfiction ghost will haunt you, bwah ha ha ha! sorry, getting carried away, it rocks, as ever love marshmallow xx |
| Marshmallows rock 2007-10-20 ch 11, | abusenice one sarah. |
| Marshmallows rock 2007-10-08 ch 10, | abusewell you can't say that sarah jane isn't determined |
| Marshmallows rock 2007-10-06 ch 9, | abusewow you're great at updating PG! quite heartfelt this one xx |
| HellGoddess 2007-10-06 ch 9, anon. | abuseThis is cool so far, keep going! |
| Marshmallows rock 2007-10-06 ch 8, | abuseoh my heavens. poor sarah, what did she ever do? |
| Chorus girl 24601 2007-10-05 ch 8, anon. | abusePoor Sarah! Poor Harry(I mean Alan)! I even feel a bit sorry for the doctor. However, please watch your spelling, I know that mistakes are very easy to make but it might help if you got a friend or someone to edit this. Please keep writing. |
| Chorus girl 24601 2007-10-05 ch 6, anon. | abuseAs nine says, Fantastic! However, watch your homophones (ex. leash not lease, incase not encase, and peek not peak.) We all know the Doctor can't keep his nose out of anything |
| HellGoddess 2007-10-05 ch 8, anon. | abuseI'm glad you've updated this, I thought you were going to leave us. Great chappie, I hope things turn out better in the end. |
| Marshmallows rock 2007-10-03 ch 7, | abusewhen are you going to update this PG, cuz it absolutely rocks. |
| Emela 2007-09-23 ch 7, | abuseWow! Wasn't fully expecting that, great chapter though! xx |
| loonytunecrazy 2007-09-22 ch 7, | abuseGreat chaoter I guss right din't I |
| the random monkey 2007-09-20 ch 6, | abuseWell I wasn't expecting that! Seriously, I was still working the gay ** angle... ^_^ Do you have a beta reader? There's some grammatical errors in your writing that kind of distract from the story. I'd consider it if I were you. Still, waiting breathlessly for the next chapter! |