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| ReganBaxter 2008-08-11 ch 1,  | abuseAWESOME! |
| lovincsimiami 2008-04-25 ch 1, | abuseWell I loved this story. The only thing I didnt like is that is a 1 shot. I would have loved for it to have cont. oh well. Still a great story though! |
| csiwolfe08 2007-10-04 ch 1, | abuseHaha, that was cute. |
| csimiamifreako 2007-09-17 ch 1, | abuseHEY, SORRY, I READ THIS STORY ON MY MOVE ON MY AUNTS BLACKBERRY, BUT THOSE ARENT EASY THINGS TO REVIEW WITH! LOL, THIS IS A GREAT STORY, SO CUTE, I LOVE IT! GREAT JOB! |
| CarolinaH.Manning 2007-09-17 ch 1, | abuseit was really fun. I really liked Ryan reaction to the baby and to her pregnacy |
| Anna 2007-09-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseCute! A little OOC, but I like it a lot anyway |
| Celine 2007-09-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseOMG! Thats was the sweetest story in the world! I kinda figured it out neer the end but still, its my fave so far;D |
| Dutchie15 2007-09-15 ch 1, | abuseUhm...alright, I'm gonna go ahead with the constructive criticism here. You're a decent writer, for one, but you need to focus and improve on your OOCness (out of character-ness). Because the way they said things just doesn't go with whom Calleigh and Ryan are. The idea is good, and the story overall is good, but it's those little moments that make no sense for the characters used. For example, Calleigh's use of words (she would never say words like poo and barf), and her suddenly being pregnant while just having ripped down the entire motherhood. So, I'm not flaming, I'm too nice for that :P but maybe you could try and improve on those points. If you need help, you know where to find me of course. |