I like this story, but it needs diologue, i know you say a cahracter explains or says something, but put it in that person's mouth, other than that i like it. ^_^

Still a great story. but inths chapter instead of having "in" you have "hi".

I don't know if anyone noticed or not or if they just didn't say anything. But, Chapters 8 and 9 are the exact same. Great story so far by the way. I'm really enjoying reading it.

Is really funny! Loves the different ways you've portrayed them characters.

the balls SO had to be thrown at his head...:) I´ll go back to reading! thanks for sharing

Why are chapters nine and ten the same?

whoa id be funny if they had kids and they started prankin both sarah and jareth lol double of what happened to just jareth lol

*sigh* Very good story, no doubts bout that...but couldn't you have pulled a couple of better pranks? No offence, but still. Love it though!

This is a really good story, but isnt this Sarah and Jareth?
Who is Jenny?

The flow of this story was a lot like the older stories by the brothers Grimm, but lacked the moral at the end that usually comes from such stories. It was a good read though.

Thank you for sharing.

very good story and sweet ending. the 'hoggle is a hottie' comment had me laughing!

i like how more story is coming into this rather than just ways she pranks him. There's more of a plot now and it makes it more interesting.

short and sweet! i missed this story!

great job! so when do we find out if Jenny likes Jareth?