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| Laugh-Cry-Live-Die 2008-06-05 ch 6,  | abuse;-; so sad... |
| SweetPinkDragon 2007-10-17 ch 6, | abuseAw, great chapter! Keep it up like this! Love th JT line, by the way ;) |
| SweetPinkDragon 2007-10-11 ch 5, | abuseAww, great fic! Nice pairings ^^ Keep writing! |
| Michelle Berger 2007-10-08 ch 5, | abuseYay for updates. Now, as I've told you, the characters are pretty much all out of character. Damien the least, but still a bit. Satan and Pip were quite off, 'specially since the only thing that EVER triggers Pip is calling him french. Damien's attitude and such wouldn't cause him to swear. There were a couple parts that the phrasing was weird, more towards the beginning... But those are all of my critiques for now. Oh, and spray on condoms don't sound enjoyable. They just don't. |
| Michelle Berger 2007-09-22 ch 4, | abuseTsk tsk tsk. That was WAY too short! Lets get longer shall we? I want to be able to say "Its SO big!" about this story! Anywhoos, onto the chapter. It was great. The part with Kenny coming in was slightly confusing as I had thought he had been invited in for tea, which is why Damien taking Pip's pants off in front of Kenny confused me... At first. And Damien should have gotten angrier when he lied! But that's just me little opinion. Update soon, Jordiie. Please? PLEASE? Yes. Yes, Jordiie WILL. |
| sunglassesANDunicorns 2007-09-22 ch 4, | abuseoh! drama! but seriously... the LLAMA SONG! hahahahaha :D |
| Michelle Berger 2007-09-18 ch 3, | abuse'Twas quite short, but still good! Pip seemed to apologize really fast though, I would have expected more conflict from that lil part. Oh well, can't wait for a new update dearie! Waffle loves ya. |
| Michelle Berger 2007-09-17 ch 2, | abuseI applaud you for updating every day. Waffle encourages you to do so. It's pretty good, and I loved it when Damien started to beat Pip up 'cause he thought he heard someone =D 'Cause that's how I roll. And it's how Damien would roll, too, especially based on the episode "Damien" (#108 :P) Anywhoo, not much to say except update soon! |
| Casa Bonita Rocks My Socks 2007-09-17 ch 2, | abuseI would have liked to have seen a light saber fight XD. Pip is so cute, although I have like Pip/Kenny rather than Pip/Damien, but you did an excellent job. |
| sunglassesANDunicorns 2007-09-16 ch 2, | abusepip/damien plus wall shmex equals who! |
| sunglassesANDunicorns 2007-09-15 ch 1, | abusegasp! a pip/damien?! whoo! ahaa. and i can totally see pip saying 'toodle-loo' thats so cute! |
| Michelle Berger 2007-09-15 ch 1, | abuseAww, I love it. Plus it has the Liverpool reference, which has to be the funniest name in England and the homeland of John Lennon, not to forget Mr.RandomBrit! who came to my house once, whom we fed pasta. The only thing that bugged me was that Mary Evelyn Brandybuck and Edward Everett Brandybuck were referred to by their full names constantly. It just looked kinda odd because of the ridiculously long names I blessed them both with... Anyways dearie, UPDATE THIS SHIZ. |