Reviews for The Keys of Awakening

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Mourning Star under the Moo... 2008-06-19 ch 13,	abuseIsn't 'levicorpus' a nonverbal, 6th year charm? Just something to keep in mind.
to lazy...again 2008-06-18 ch 1, anon.	abusesorry, i meant when hermionie was suspicious, not nervous. wow, that was a random/odd/stupid mistake. ok. thats it. bye. -jolie
2 lazy 2 log in [the update... 2008-06-18 ch 13, anon.	abuseman, this story completeley and utterly ROCKS! i am like... obsessed with it. no joke. its an obsession. the only thing i think id like [but who cares what i think lol] is if the hogwarts students [harry hermionie ron fred greorge, not the whole school] were a bit more observent on the weirdness of the mutants. i noticed you did that in this chapter when hermionie was nervous, and i was super happy! no joke. it made my day [jk]. ok. thats enough of me talking. imma go now. -jolie & izzie [too lazy to log in, theupdaters]
luke 2008-06-17 ch 13, anon.	abuseThat was a really good chapter. You are a really good writer. I love this story!! I love how you had the girls go into the forbidden forest and the screech owl.
jessica 2008-04-06 ch 9, anon.	abuseplease write more
theupdaters 2008-03-08 ch 11,	abuseThis is. The best. Story...EVER. honestly. THE BEST. when are you gonna update? is it soon? please let it be SOON. or i might die. seriously. i just might...DROP DEAD. oh, and when do Harry, Ron, and Hermionie find out about the mutants? they do find out...right? either way, PUR-LEZE UPDATE. -jolie
casper 2008-02-22 ch 1, anon.	abuseI can't wait for the first task great writing though I am only a Storm fan it was a better idea to have all of them in the tounament, also I love how you use the Harry Potter storyline but XMen in the forefront (so far) Thanks for the iteresting chapter update soon
rea 2008-02-20 ch 11, anon.	abuseI love the new chapter. It was ausome. You made the action sequence really cool and funny. I love the way you showed everyone's character. Please update soon!!
Mourning Star under the Moo... 2008-02-12 ch 10,	abuseGreetings! Okay, a couple of minor details plus an editing note. Here is your sentence: {“Maybe someone is hoping one of these four is going to die for it,” Moody muttered. Ororo’s jaw dropped.} It should be "these four ARE going to die for it." Just remember plural verses singular. I'm thinking that you are screwing up the names of the Weasleys. Remember, Charlie is the one who lives in Romania and works with dragons. Bill (short for William) lives in Egypt (but moves back to England after book 4) and is a curse breaker. Arthur is the father and loves everything to do with Muggles. Hey, a random thought - if mutants are known about in the Muggle world, then Harry and Hermonie should know (vaguely) about them. I can't remember if you have them known or not, but it is just something to keep in mind. Anyways, I hope all this helps. Good luck with everything!
Tornade 2008-01-26 ch 9,	abusei personally think cliffhangers like that should be forbbiden by law...great story anyway... tornade
Sakura999 2008-01-24 ch 9,	abuseNice fic. I liked the plot and I liked Jean. Would like to read more - update soon ! If you like you can post on w w w . justexpressing . com - the readers would like it and you would get some more reviews and feedback. I did that. You can join and post under Cartoons - put in under X-Men sub cat.
jeanne 2008-01-21 ch 8, anon.	abuseHmm... I don't really think that you should have any of the girls in the triwizard tourniment. I've really liked that the girls storyline doesn't overlap with the Potter trio's too much and I like that it isn't dependent on them. I think this would be a good time to advance the apocolpyse plotline. You haven't really done much with that yet. If you do enter one of the girls in the contest it should be either Ororo of Kitty. Jean could use her powers too easily without being noticed but it might be interesting to face Kitty off against a dragon. Also, if you do enter them you should use the physical combat skills they learned in the danger room to their full potential. But please, please, PLEASE, don't enter the girls and let them use their mutant powers. They're supposed to be kept hidden, after all. Update Soon!
Tornade 2008-01-20 ch 8,	abuseHeya, that was a great chapter...can't wait for another one...I would like it if Ororo enters the tournament...kinda cool thing...well, it's your choice in the end...keep up the good writing, Tornade
casper 2008-01-19 ch 8, anon.	abusePlease put Storm I really think the Jean/Phoenix has been played out in the comics and movies not saying I don't like the character but the damsel in distress has gotten me fed of of the storyline, anyway Excellent story please don't stop in writing in the middle of it.
Ghostdraconi 2008-01-19 ch 8,	abuseNice, I am really enjoying this. As for the girls entering the tournament, the best one would be Storm. My reason is that for the other two the first two challenges would be a cakewalk especially the one against the dragon. Jean could just grab the egg and Kitty can just walk through the flames, Storm would be the only one who has to put up a fight and a Storm vs Dragon fight in midair could be special.

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