 abbylee 3/25/02 . chapter 1I'm intrigued with how every story I read of yours looks at a different character, and you manage to get into each and every head.
I loved this story, but I found the phonetic spelling of Doyle's dialogue to be really distracting. By his second scene, I stopped reading everything he had to say.
I like the parallels between Joyce's secret trip and Angel's secret trip. Good job! |