I liked the way you explained near the end of the chapter the significant difference between Holmes's relationship with compudroid Watson and his relationship with the real one. Its really interesting that Holmes was capable of getting that deeply attached to a friend again(whether human or not) yetn ot have that connection in any way remind him of the old connection he used to have with the human being.

I also like the way you write fight/action scenes. Really gets you visually into the action,and puts you in the role of the character(s)..(something which I fear will test the reader later on:P). One stylistic thing I noticed-when you want to emphasize something you tend to bold it instead of italicize it. I think I may like the way it would looks in italics better(even though you also use them for dialogue)...thoough its totally up to you.

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"Bus, hovercar...skyscraper!" he continued, as Lestrade avoided one collision after another. ..."shut up, Holmes!" The Lestrade/Holmes bantering is still going strong and I love it. Actually, great character interactions in general, actually. Excited to read on!

The back and forth between Lestrade and Holmes is really fun to read here.
I like the subtlety of how their relationship is dealt with...esp. the part when Holmes is talking to Deirdre before Lestrade gets there, when he answers her comment "sometimes a guy won't help a girl because he doesn't want anyone to know he likes her" with "True, but I help Lestrade with her cases all the time." Nice classic Holmes moment: he could be saying he helps Lestrade with her cases because he doesn't like her(if he did, he wouldn't help her), or he could be indicating he doesn't care if its known he likes her. Nice!(Also, the "you're a lot more subtle" follow up comment really highlights the subtlety even of the comment he just made).

The violin moment was definitely really cute, as was both their reactions once the phone rang.Nice build up of tension in the last section, and transition into the juicy "game is afoot" action.
Great work so far:)

Hi Knife86,

What a well-written and insightful rehashing of a classic scene!The way you introduce us to Moriarty's mind pulls you in, as it sets the scene for a much more emotionally complex and multi-dimensional character than most adaptations of the villian allow.

Your attention to detail also makes this prologue exceptional. The subtle reference to Holmes' retired profession as a bee-keeper using Moriarty's question about the honey, and the detailing of Holmes's expression when Moriarty looks at his face while they're hanging over the Reichenbach Falls are both really well done.

There's also great detail in the writing as well as the content...for example, the feeling generated by the phrase "And indeed he was not", which alarms us and highlights the unnaturalness of the new Morarity.

All in all, great intro! Look forward to reading more!

:D I very much enjoyed these. There is a lot of emotion in them and I find that to be the best part of these characters because it is the part we rarely see. For some reason, I liked the talks between Holmes and Mace the best. I love any writing where Holmes lets slip that secret side of himself that no one else can see. Of course, the last line Holmes said in the first scene was priceless...

These were cute. Lestrade getting a good kick at Moriarty, even with all her injuries, was just fabulous. I loved it.

Mace's heartwarming moment with Holmes was very familial, and showed something about her and her background. Nice touch.

Watson and Mace; this combination always ends up amusing somehow. I liked her casual confession in the "I-know-it's-illegal,-but-I-find-it-necessasry-to-my-work,-and-as-long-as-it's-not-hurting-anyone,-there's-nothing-wrong-with-it" voice.

Then Watson asks her in to tea, how very British. Classic.

WHO!! Epilogue rocks! I love how everything is tidied up at the end. Shinwell staying with Deirdre was awesome, Holmes being suckered into helping Letrade move was hilarious, Lestrade's new apartment sounds great (and bigger), and the dinner party was a nice touch.

A big shout out to A Karswyll and Bowen for their masterful work in editing; the difference is noticable and much appreciated.

I look forward to Deleted Scenes. Even at the end of the story, you still manage to surprise the readers.

You did a great job with this story. I look forward to future ones, and wish you good luck on all your story-writing.

Great, great chapter. I chose the memories of Moriarty about Holmes and women in the XIX Century, especially Irene Adler (I love this!) Congratulations.

Holy toledo, that entire story kicked major ass! I loved it! I'm only sad that it's over...(and that Holmes and Lestrade didn't kiss... :D) I hate Moriarty, but I love the last line he says. It fit so well and it just made for a great ending. I love what Holmes said too. You made it sound so moving and so eloquent, it was beautiful! You are truly a great writer and I hope this isn't the only fic I see from you! (Especially if it has to do with SH22...)
~Neoholmesz

But but but...Moriarty didn't get what he deserved! I'm sorry to say but after all the suffring I witnessed, I do not call this a happy ending, that man has to pay! Excellent story all in all.

Yes!! Excellently done!! The bad guys get away, and Holmes is almost killed (again), but the gang is back together, and Moriarty's plan is on its way to defeat!! And we wvwn get to see a little SHxBL moment. Yay!

I can't believe the story is almost over. This has been five months of constant updates for you. That can't have been easy, but it is very much appreciated. I know of no other author who gave specific times for updates. You rock!

That was awesome! I really liked the way this chapter played out (especially the hug!), although I'm sad that it's ending.

Aw, I can just imagine them running towards each other, hugging, (cuddling?) so cute! And I loved the fact that just by Holmes tone she understood he's alright (not that it takes Sherlock Holmes to understand that ne? ^_~)

I almost missed this one! I didn't think there would be another chapter so soon!

This was fantastic. We learn a little more about Murdock and Mickey (nice Disney reference, BTW), and get to see the irregulars again. And finally, Grayson is doing something constructive.

I eagerly await Holmes Wreaks Havoc!

Excellent chapter!! Very exciting, poor Mace takes on so much, but still keeps a sharp tongue. I cheered when she kicked Moriarty, nice touch. Glad someone got to do that.

OMG! I was scared to death when Lestrade wouldn't wake up. I really like how you write out Holmes' emotions though. I feel so bad for him! He needs multiple hugs...and a few kisses from Lestrade... :)