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| Updates-Please 2008-06-16 ch 4,  | abuseWOW! I was not expecting that! Nice twist. I can't wait to see what happens next. |
| butterflyswest 2008-06-05 ch 4, | abuseO hell... |
| siddika 2008-06-03 ch 4, | abuseFantastic job and I was not expecting Tony to be dead. |
| Updates-Please 2008-01-26 ch 3, | abuseLovely chapter. I realle love where you're going with this fic. Keep it up. |
| butterflyswest 2008-01-26 ch 3, | abuseOh I need more of this! |
| DocRock06 2008-01-24 ch 3, | abuseGreat chapter! I can't wait for more! DocRock06 |
| siddika 2008-01-23 ch 3, | abuseGood job and I like Lauren and Pratt teaming up to get Ray and Neela together. |
| awtr101fan 2008-01-10 ch 2, | abusethis is a great story. as 4 who lauren should tag team w/ 2 help the roomies...i think she should get hop from abby b/c i think pratt is a little 2 biased since hi was michael's best friend. but time has passed between the 2 chapters so maybe he's changed. if that's what's going on w/ him, than maybe he could help the girls out a bit. can't wait 4 the next part. keep up the good work :) -erica |
| Updates-Please 2007-10-31 ch 2, | abuseI can't wait to see how Lauren gets them back together. Fantastic. Update soon. |
| butterflyswest 2007-10-29 ch 2, | abuseOh BOy!! I need to have more of this |
| siddika 2007-10-29 ch 2, | abuseGood job and I like Lauren already. |
| DocRock06 2007-10-29 ch 2, | abuseGreat update, and i cant wait for more! DockRock06 |
| cmtaylor531 2007-10-29 ch 2, | abuseLoving it! |
| cmtaylor531 2007-10-27 ch 1, | abuseIm loving the start... Seriosly this first chapter was awesome and i hope you write more! |
| starrytearss 2007-09-26 ch 1, | abuseThis is way out of character. For one thing, when the shooting occured, Neela was at her husband's funeral, mourning his death. Her first priority when she was notified of the shooting (that we saw) was Abby. Neela couldn't stand being around Ray at this point. She is not as open as you make her to be in her confrontation with Greg. Secondly, there is no way that Ray would have gone off the way he did in the lounge on the day of his best friend's husband's funeral. This is more what would happen after Gates in season 13. He would have been much more understanding, and deffinetly more compassionate than you made him out to be in this chapter. Try to remember the characters as they are in the show, not how you want them to be, because then it's not believeable. |