So Hermione does care about Harry to some further extent.

Hmm...a substitution jutsu...primitive yet effective.

I love it so far, but I've found a problem. From Ga (were i live)to Cali. is 4 hrs. So I would estimate that England to Miami wouls be around 10 - 11 1/2 hrs. Just saying... = )
-Celeste

This is going to sound like a flame, so stop reading if you're going to get ballistic.

First off - it's YIN and Yang, not Ying and Yang. Judging by your story thus far, you have no idea what the real yin yang symbol stands for. I would recommend reading Tao Teh Ching by Lao Tzu, then coming back to work on this story.

Try to find a beta - you have an interesting story line going on, but your writing has missing commas, misspelled words, poor grammar choices, etc. If you can find someone to help out (or simply reread aloud to yourself) then your story will be in much better shape. Also, the constant change of cities is confusing - I think your formatting could change to be easier to follow.

I'm interested in the plot, so I can't wait for that.

luv it cant wasit for more