Well, I finished the story, and I still hold true what I wrote before: it was overall well written, interesting, and with a fair amount of emotions.

The only thing I didn't like was all that genetic layer, which in my opinion was unnecessary and detracting. The only thing DNA codes are proteins, not thoughts, ideas, or objectives. Of course, there is a range of behaviours that is coded in the DNA (like sucking or walking), but it's extremely far-fetched to speak about higher brain functions being influenced by strands of DNA and/or RNA. It's not a matter of scale or probability, it's downright illogical when you look at biology and socialisation. Also, the concept that DNA can be destroyed by destroying the machinery that created it is completely off the wall. I'm not saying that it makes the story bad, I just think it would be better if the only factor was some kind of "psi" or "life force", without putting the GCATUX in it.

Still, the story was really enjoyable, and I guess I'll have to read more from you.

Okay, I only read one chapter so far, but I must say I really like it. It partially comes from my own love of sci-fi (not to mention shoujo-ai, if you forgive me), but the thing I would like to congratulate you most on is the writing abilities. Your writing needs some polishing maybe, but overall it's very good, clear, communicative, and unrestrained, which is not as prolific on the as I would want to.

I'm heading to chapter 2. Can't wait.

great story.

Hey! I finally read it! And an incredible story it is! To be perfectly honest, if i was in say, Kagura's position, i wouldn't freak out as much, but that's just me. Still, i guess if you have a psychic child in your midst, you don't know what to think.

Hm, and Koyomiko as the beast of the Apocalypse...now that's a scary thought! XD

I'm gonna add this to my DA favs too.

Awesome fic, that'd my review in two words. In detail, the OCs were actually playing a significant role: something I really enjoy. I'm glad I now have closure on Dagon's plans._

If I were Dagon, assuming I'd also posess the information he did, I'd first try to rectify the situation... and then I'd freak out. :)

Finally, there's just one thing I have to say...

400 BABIES!

Yes, I DID catch the Powerthurst reference! That was perfect for Tomo.

-oppdis

Very nice fic, and Koyomiko is in it! Awesome!

Brillant fic, I'm happy I finally got to read it all, I'm so sorry I took so long, please forgive me. And going to the past to see how Dagon decided that Tomo and Yomi would be the ones to bring about Koyomiko was increditastic. (Incradible and fantastic get it... sorry -_-o)

Now If I was taking the place of one of the characters.. well no doubt.. I'd freak out lol. Keep it up and I'll be wating for Terra Anima so until then, take care...AR

'till next time

It was said when Chiyo and Sakaki said goodbye to Kaede and Tatio. (sniff) Fate can be cruel sometimes. But it seems that Dagon turned out to be an okay guy after all. Oh and I totally agree with you about Tomo being affectionate.

Tomo: Not you too.

Anyway, I'm so glad that they forgave Osaka and Kagura. This shows the Azu-Girls have the closest bond around.

But hm, I wonder what Kaorin and Kagura's daughter's name would have been. (winks)

Take care...AR

'till next time

This is indeed a said chapter, Tatio, Kaede, are dying. And it says that Koyomiko will survive. This my freind is truly a great fic. I am so truly sorry that it is taking me a while to review. So until then, take care...AR

'till next time

A great end to a Brilliant story! Kudos to you, sir!

Hmm...if I was captured, i'd probably have been terrified, then just thought "Oh well..." and gone along with the dagon's plan, I wouldn't have had the courage to make an escape like our beloved girls did.

With that said, can't wait for "Terra Anima"! So keep up the excellent work and can't wait for your next fic!

Very nice finish. Looking forward to 'Terra Anima'!

OK, so, if I would replace myself in Helix, I would have never actually kept my cool, like the girls did. I would have lost it long ago.

"OHMYGODIVEBEENCAPTUREDWHATTHEHELLAMIGONADO?!"

Or something like that...

Anyway, nice finish!!

-JBK2K1

awesome ending to an awesome story my friend. and XD about Tomo...she really was dumb her whole life...


YAY KOYOMIKO!!

Hmm, yes...it all makes sense. Uh-huh, uh-huh. I enjoyed this fic very much (I voted for it in the poll) and I will definitely enjoy your next writing project.

That is all I will say in regards to the ending of the fic. I kind of don't want to get into my thought-filled discussions today, as my mind is completely focused on finishing a (sweet and cute, with a bit of humor on the side) fanfic that coincides with the picture I am making for my fans. ^_^;

And what if I was put in the same situation? Hmm...I'd probably resist at first but would give in out of fear. I seriously would. I wouldn't have the guts to stand up and try to escape like the girls did...My internet persona, however, would probably try to escape in a dashing, stunning, shoujo-storyline-esque style.

And then probably fail. And then rise again to finish the story off on a strikingly positive note.

That's it, really...

Good job.

BETRAYEL BY KAGURA AND OSAKA?! Say it isn't so. And Kaorin still has her suspicions about Koyomiko, is she immune to her? And Chiyo wise for her age showing Taito that humans can be kind and telling him he is family. (sniff) I missed these fics, I hope to read the other chapters soon, so until then take care...AR

'till next time

Yay for happy endings! YESHA! Can't wait for Christmas Help Desk. GO GO GO! YAYA- (Cut off by being shot by a tranquilizer
shot by one of his servants)

Servant: Carry on.

- Keshi-sama