|Reviews for Meanwhile, on the Dutchman|
| Topgallant 10/1/07 . chapter 13
Sorry I didn't review your last chapter, but it was good! I like that you've added in darker aspects off life on the Dutchman; that really was the majority of it, I suppose. You did a very good job of it, especially in this chapter, with the baby.
I like how you portrayed a simple 'It's okay', and the effect it had on Bibsy. Even so, you still added humor in that chapter, which I enjoyed.
I also like the mushymush stuff at the end. That's my personal opinion, but Palafico's just too sweet for you to /not/ do that. Ahem.
I want more!
| Flipper Boid Skua 10/1/07 . chapter 13
It's okay...my stories are becoming slower to update and I understand. Just don't take so long that I completely lose hope of this story.
This was a fast update...I like it!
Davy has some family issues...and I actually feel sorry for the little "water rat". I guess not all babies are, in my sense, 'evil things that stare at you like they want to kill you.'(It's true!)
Maccus...I feel bad for you. Should've learned more on sharks. Just touch their nose and they'll know you were human and back off. That's what I did when I was at this shark petting thing and one of them wanted a nibble. Learned the technique on the discovery channel.
Anywho, be sure to continue. I'm pretty patient...(cough)
| Flipper Boid Skua 10/1/07 . chapter 12
I hate cliffhangers! Hurry, so I don't have to suffer long! Sorry it took long to review, I usually can't go on computer during the weekends.
Davy's not going to kill the baby is he? Normally, I'm immune to baby cuteness, and don't go aw when I see them, but to kill them? When they barely knew life? Oh, well, Davy's Davy and that's why we love him.
If I was to meet them and Bibsy tried to talk to me, I'd be like "Sup gurlfriend! How you doin!"
Anywho, I love both chapters...poor Davy was all sad...And Bibsy's hangover near the beginning. "Who are you an' why are you killin' my ears?" Priceless...
PS Macky is such a jerk...though to be truthful, I'd send a kid flying if they got on my nerves...I ain't gonna lie. Adults see kids as still innocent nowadays. I know better than to believe that. I know alot of kids who already talking bout stuff they're not supposed to.
Please continue! Don't leave me hangin on the edge of the cliff here!
| thecolouryes 9/30/07 . chapter 12
*is sad for the poor family now*
| Topgallant 9/28/07 . chapter 11
I just love your description of 'Us' and 'Them'. However, I thought Clanker used to be one of 'Them', because of his fighting skills. Perhaps he's been bumped down...or am I mistaken?
Anyway, the next chapter looks promising. I can't wait.
| Lone Wolf 9/28/07 . chapter 11
ah yes the joys of hangovers, especially when you have to work. And yes the us vrs them is still very true in many places. Good work looking forward to the next chapters.
| Topgallant 9/27/07 . chapter 10
That was a fun chapter. I imagine I would have liked to see all of their acts...from a distance. A very safe distance.
Still, fun new update. I want to hear more about the 'Davy and Palafico' situation. Sure, he and Bibs are talking again, but for how long?
| Flipper Boid Skua 9/26/07 . chapter 10
I won't be any good at making drunk stories. Closest I went to alchohol was accidently drinking a sip mistaking it for fruit punch...I didn't like it.
Anywho, a talent show was a great idea for a chapter. I liked Jimmy's cuz it scared everyone at first. I love her last line cuz I can so imagine myself saying it. “I’m not drunk... I’m... full of rum...”
Macky Hammer is such a party pooper. He really needs to learn how to have fun and just join the crowd...
I wonder what Davy'll do once Bibsy gets...undrunk. Can't wait...so give me next chapter!
| Topgallant 9/26/07 . chapter 9
Very good update. Its nice that you put in more of a serious tone, but kept the humor in very well.
I loved it. I can't wait to hear more.
| Flipper Boid Skua 9/25/07 . chapter 9
Yeah! Bibsy and Palafico could talk to eachother when Davy's asleep! Engenious! I love friend drama.
The whole sleep talking bit...my sister talks in her sleep. Then I could corrupt her dreams simply by saying things back. It's hilarious. Don't worry Bibsy...ears aren't everything. Palafico in love? With who? Is it Bisby? I won't be surprised if he's crushing a bit!
The "Oh yeah? Yeah" scene was adorable! I should do that when my parents are here, just to annoy them. So does this mean Bibsy's trying to get a new friend? Or is her relationship with Clanker always been that...weird...? You know what I mean even if I can't put it into words at the moment.
(using Bisby's "whining four-year-old I-want-candy voice") I want more chappies! Please...
| Rokhal 9/25/07 . chapter 8
The rope-tangle bit was fun. Boys...
Good point in the last section about ship-board romance. With a practically omniscient captain who's that bitter, it's just impossible.
| Flipper Boid Skua 9/24/07 . chapter 8
Poor Palafico... I feel so sorry for him...getting a talking to simply for saying one word to Bibsy. What is Davy's problem? If it's not friendship then what is it? You're drawing me in here! I need more chappies!
I like when she was harrassing Greenbeard, having a 'conversation when she has no idea what he's saying. “I know, but why are you so in love with Oglivey?” I love that line most in this chapter!
I also liked the rope part. I can imagine a few crewmembers tied up so much, they can't walk without stumbling.
Can't wait until the next chapter. Hope to see it soon!
| Lone Wolf 9/24/07 . chapter 8
I've been gone for the last couple days and just read your updates. I 've gotta say, good work. The part with Maccus was sad but you did warn us not all times aboard the Dutchman were happy times, as expected. I have to say, Bibsy's smart comment to Davy Jones in this chapter was pretty damn gutsy and priceless. I think you have kept Davy Jones in character especially in this chapter as I can see him doing the things you described. I would like to see Bibsy confront Davy Jones about Palafico even though we know how that would probably end. Update when you can. Oh, by the way, happy birthday. (I saw this in your other Pirates stories in the author notes)
| Topgallant 9/24/07 . chapter 8
Very, very funny. This story just fits so smoothly with your other one. I love how we get to know the crew so much better, and I've grown even fonder of Palafico.
The characters all still retain their personalities from Bibsy I. And yes- I'm going to call the stories Bibsy I and Bibsy II...because it's easy that way.
I find myself wanting more, which isn't surprising. Excellent work!
| Topgallant 9/24/07 . chapter 1
Hallo. S'me. It's been some time since I took a look at your profile, and I was thrilled to find new stories. In fact...how did you get all those words in this new story in such a short time?
You're really talented! I wish there was some way for me to read this story faster. Ah well, one chapter at a time. You know I don't need to tell you how fabulous it is. But I will anyway. Haha.