Reviews for The Night Before

Reviews For: The Night Before

deadly-bliss 2008-06-30 ch 5,	abuse. . . Woah. I've never read Toko before, so I decided on giving it a shot. I somehow came upon yours and I must say that . . . this was not what I expected. I'll give you props though, I enjoyed it somewhat. But I was initially put off when I realized how out of character and corny they were acting. :'( This wasn't the best, and you contradicted yourself a few times, so I must tell you that you should prep up on what you're writing before starting another chapter. :') Or maybe it's just my biases towards Zutara, Taang, Jet Lee, Soki, and all that jazz. x3 Good luck on your next fanfiction! :'D
Zenjamin 2008-04-16 ch 5,	abuseThe story itself seemed pretty OC, but you are the first ive seen to show how good a mom Toph would be. vision.
Zenjamin 2008-04-16 ch 1,	abuseLOL... wow, verry OC. I could never imagine either of them being so corny. ... but support Toko, so i still like it.
Liooness 2008-04-01 ch 5,	abuselove the story, but was there any history to TOph and Zuko? or have i just not read it yet. it was great and Toph and Zuko made me laugh, and yeah, toko rules!
Juria 2007-10-15 ch 5,	abuseHey, it's me. Just wanting anyone who enjoyed this story to know that the first two parts of my pre-quel/in-between story "Missing Pieces" are currently up, so if anyone wants to read and review 'em, go right ahead. Also, yeah, I know I screwed up on the second chapter timeline wise, not good with timelines.
Black and White Candid 2007-10-13 ch 5,	abuseNice. It was good. The thing I have to criticize most is pretty small. This is a very common mistake. You gave thier kids japanese names when in fact they write and "name" in mandarin chinese. Hw do I know? I take mandarin... hehe! I award 3 cookies (basically I gave you a B or B+)
lazare 2007-10-03 ch 5,	abuseI think I have already read this fic on deviantart. There's not a lot of zuko/toph story, that's esy to remember. It's a nice fic, I love Toph, when she's possessive with her man ^^. Au revoir.
Marshall Turner 2007-10-02 ch 5,	abuseMy rating (out of four): One star There are a few memorable passages in “The Night Before,” although their quality greatly varies. Here's one that comes early in the story when Zuko is looking at Toph: “For some odd reason, it was more than the usual male hormones that made him stare at her on this night. Maybe it was the glimmer on her eyes, or maybe it was the way her tunic seemed to wrap around her body just a little tighter. Whatever it was, she was hot.” Zuko, that sound a lot like the usual male hormones to me. They make you pay attention to stuff like that. There's another line that occurs near the end of the story during the apocalyptic fight between Aang and Zuko and Fire Lord Ozai. What the Fire Lord says is definitely worth noting: " 'When I get through with you, my bastard son, you're body will match your face!' " What is he talking about? If my understanding of the word “bastard” is correct, then is the Fire Lord saying that Zuko is not really his son? What kind of “Star Wars” plotting is going on here? The story is filled lines like those above, which contradict their own logic, most often within the same sentence. It just so happens that they are the most thought-provoking elements of the story, which is unintelligibly bad. It's the same Teamwork in the End to Defeat the Fire Lord story you've read numerous times before on this site. It's also devoid of a greater sense of characterization, and relies entirely too much on it's cheesy plot and dialogue to get it through. None of the characters are at all like their television show counterparts. They're actually not accountable in anyway. They're either all stereotypes (Iroh is fixated on tea, Toph just says lines that belong in a Van Damme movie) or just plain out-of-character. I hated how Sokka managed to get Azula drunk on cactus juice. If I were Azula (better yet, if Azula was herself), Sokka would've been dead before he could get within twenty feet of the woman. The dialogue is probably the worst part of the story. How many one-liners, insults, good-bye speeches, monologues, and overly dramatic ramblings do we have to be put through before we realize that there's not a single quotation line in the story? Actually, there is one funny line that's still stuck in my head. Sensual things are happening, and Zuko is witness to them. Toph, his new girlfriend, notices. Her response: “ 'Zuko, are you alright, you're pulse is increasing.' ” It's funny because we all know where that pulse is increasing.
sokkaluver1513 2007-09-22 ch 1,	abuseI LOVED IT!i love toko stories♥
music hime 2007-09-21 ch 5, anon.	abuseloved it so much it was cute,fluffy,and aswome
Story Critc 2007-09-21 ch 5, anon.	abuseI actually really enjoyed the story,even though I'm not a big Toko fan.I have recently received a very troubling message from a certain author and that seemed to put me down a bit.But no matter,I will continue my reviewing until I can't no more!

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