Hewwo.It's me, bubbles10 from ol story^^

Cute story once you're past all the center justification! (I know it's hard; that's why it's better to write and format a story on a word processor then cut and paste it over!). I'd liked to've seen a little slower pace with more casual descriptions of what's going on as you've shown you're capable of, and take more of a 1st person view in terms of how it feels to be a Puff and how your folks and friends would react to it. Would you want a secret identity? What are your special weapons? I say stretch it out! In fact why not do a re-write and give it another go? Also iron out those pesky minor details, like it was an iceberg that was blown up, not a glacier. Check out PPGZ episodes on YouTube for detail checking and more story ideas for your sequel!

Keep it up and stay safe!

Dee

Please update if you have the chance!